Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce fillers (uh) and avoid tense inconsistency. For example, say when you had the bike, how often you rode it, and a brief memory or reason to make the answer more engaging.

예시: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it to the local park with my friends at weekends, and we would race each other around the paths. It was a great way to stay active and spend time together.

제안: Give a direct opinion, then support it with clear, specific reasons and examples. Avoid repetition and fillers. Use linking words like “because,” “for example,” or “in particular,” and correct grammar (e.g., ‘most people,’ ‘my family members used to’).

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and practical for short trips. For example, many people commute to work or the market by bike, and several members of my family used to cycle every day for errands and exercise.

× I had a bike, uh, and I went to, I usually went to a park with my friends.

✓ I had a bike, and I usually went to a park with my friends.

The sentence mixes past simple 'went' with the adverb 'usually' which indicates habitual action; keep the past tense consistent by using 'usually went' rather than 'went' alone. Also remove filler commas and repetitions for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'usually went' for habitual past actions and avoid repeating verbs or filler words.

× Yes I do because in my country most of people ride a bike and.

✓ Yes, I do, because in my country most people ride bikes.

'Most of people' is incorrect; use 'most people'. Also 'ride a bike' should be plural as a general statement: 'ride bikes'. Add commas for clarity and remove the trailing conjunction 'and'. Suggestion: Use 'most people' and plural noun for general habits: 'ride bikes'.

× Uh, especially my family member loves uh, especially my family member use it used to.

✓ Especially my family members love them and used to use them.

The original repeats 'my family member' and mixes tenses and pronouns. Use plural 'family members' if referring to more than one, and match verbs: 'love' (present) and 'used to use' (past habit). Also replace vague 'it' with 'them' (bikes) to agree in number. Suggestion: Be consistent with singular/plural and pronoun reference; state whether you mean one member or several and keep verb tenses clear.