Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar, reduce hesitations, and add one or two specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief supporting detail using a linking word. Also avoid repetition (don’t repeat “I had a bike”).

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small pink-and-purple bicycle when I was about eight, and I used to ride it to the park every afternoon. Because it was lightweight and comfortable, I quickly learned to ride without training wheels and felt very proud when I could cycle on my own.

제안: Improve pronunciation and word choice (e.g., 'bikes' not 'barks'), remove filler words, and provide a clearer reason with a linking word. Give a specific example or comparison to support your opinion.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular, especially among teenagers. For example, many students cycle to school because it is cheaper and faster than taking public transport, and cycling groups and bike-sharing schemes in cities have also increased their popularity.

× Yeah, sure I have.

✓ Yeah, sure I did.

The question asks about the past 'when you were a child', so the response should use past tense. 'Have' is present tense and does not match the time frame. Use 'did' to indicate past possession (I did have a bike). Alternatively, say 'Yes, I did.' to be concise. Suggestion: Pay attention to the time expression in the question and match verb tense accordingly.

× It was like umm, pink and purple color.

✓ It was, um, pink and purple.

The phrase 'pink and purple color' is redundant because 'pink and purple' already indicate colors. Also 'like' as a filler is unnecessary in formal correction. Use simple past 'It was pink and purple.' or include a single filler 'um' if reflecting spoken style. Suggestion: Remove redundant words and match adjective use for colors (no need for the word 'color').

× I enjoyed that time because biking was so fascinating and enjoyable at that moment.

✓ I enjoyed that time because biking was so fascinating and enjoyable.

Using 'at that moment' is redundant when you already use past tense 'enjoyed that time'. Also the adjective 'fascinating and enjoyable' is fine, but avoid duplicating time markers. Ensure consistent past tense; no present tense verbs are used. Suggestion: Keep a single clear past time reference and remove redundant time phrases.

× Umm, in my point of view, uh, barks are really well known in my country, particularly among teenagers, because it's really, uh, exciting, active.

✓ Umm, in my point of view, uh, bikes are very popular in my country, particularly among teenagers, because they are exciting and active.

Multiple issues: 'in my point of view' is nonstandard; better 'in my point of view' -> 'in my opinion' or 'from my point of view'. 'Barks' is a spelling error for 'bikes'. 'Well known' is used for people/places; 'popular' suits objects. 'It's' refers to singular but 'bikes' is plural, so use 'they are'. 'Exciting, active' needs conjunction 'and' and 'active' describes people, not bikes; it's acceptable to say 'they are exciting and promote activity'. Suggestion: Use 'in my opinion' or 'from my point of view', correct spelling to 'bikes', choose 'popular' for trends, match plural verbs/pronouns, and join adjectives with 'and' or rephrase to describe their effect.