Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer grammatically correct, more concise, and better structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and unnecessary repetition. For example, correct tense (“had” not “have”), give a clear age, and briefly describe how you learned (who taught you or where).

예시: Yes, I had a bike as a child. I learned to ride it when I was about ten years old, and my older cousin taught me how to balance by holding the seat until I felt steady. After a few afternoons practicing in the park, I could ride on my own.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct singular/plural forms and linking words (for example, “because” and “moreover”). Mention specific groups who use bikes or typical situations to make your answer more informative and natural.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an inexpensive and convenient form of transport for short trips. For instance, many students and market vendors use bicycles to commute, and moreover, cycling is a common way for people to keep fit in the mornings.

× Yes, I have a bike since when I was child uh, maybe during when I was 10 years old, I was able to ride a bike for the first time and I was able to learn how to balance uh, during riding that bike and when.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. Maybe when I was about 10 years old, I rode a bike for the first time and learned how to balance while riding it.

This sentence uses the present tense 'have' with a past time expression 'since when I was child' and has incorrect article use and word order. Use past tense 'had' for possessions in the past (Present tense issue, ID 6). Also use the article 'a' before 'child' and simpler phrasing: 'when I was about 10 years old' and 'rode a bike for the first time' is clearer. Replace 'during riding that bike' with 'while riding it' for natural adverbial phrase. Suggested improvements: use consistent past tense for past events, include articles ('a child'), simplify redundant phrases ('was able to' -> 'rode'/'learned'), and use 'while' for simultaneous actions.

× Yes, uh, bike is uh, popular in our country because it is one of the cheapest uh, mode of transportation and using bike it is also one of our means of exercise.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country because they are one of the cheapest modes of transportation, and using a bike is also a good way to exercise.

The sentence has several number and agreement errors: 'bike is' should be plural 'bikes are' when speaking generally (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). 'one of the cheapest mode' should be 'one of the cheapest modes' to match plural 'one of the'. Also 'using bike' needs an article: 'using a bike'. Additionally, tense/number agreement for pronoun: use 'they are' to match plural 'bikes'. Improve fluency by saying 'a good way to exercise.' Suggested improvements: match singular/plural consistently, use correct phrase 'one of the + plural noun', include articles where required.