Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details linked coherently. Use correct verb forms and avoid filler words (uh, um). Mention where you rode, how often, and one lasting effect. Use linking words like 'also' or 'because' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes. I had a bicycle as a child and I rode it almost every weekend. I often cycled in a large park near my home that ran beside a river, which made the rides very pleasant. Also, those regular rides improved my fitness and gave me confidence riding in traffic, so I still enjoy cycling today.

제안: Answer directly, then support with two specific reasons and use linking words. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, plural forms). Give specific examples of where people cycle and why (health, transport, leisure).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use bicycles for short journeys and leisure because cities have numerous parks and safe cycle lanes. For example, families ride in the central park on weekends, and many workers cycle to nearby offices to save money and keep fit.

× Of course, when I was younger, I usually enjoyed it riding a bike.

✓ Of course, when I was younger, I usually enjoyed riding a bike.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed directly by a gerund without an object pronoun 'it'. Remove 'it' and use 'enjoyed riding' to form the correct verb + -ing structure. Suggestion: 'enjoy' + verb-ing (e.g., 'enjoyed riding').

× There was a big bigger park in my country.

✓ There was a big park in my country.

Using 'big bigger' is redundant and ungrammatical. Choose a single adjective: either 'big' or 'bigger' depending on comparison. Here no comparison is needed, so use 'big'. Suggestion: avoid stacking adjectives with comparative form unless making a comparison clause.

× Uh, I usually went to the park and going, going, uh, and riding a bike among the river.

✓ I usually went to the park and rode my bike along the river.

The sentence mixes past tense 'went' with present participle 'going'. Maintain past tense: use 'rode' (past of 'ride'). Also 'among the river' is incorrect preposition use; use 'along the river'. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and use correct preposition ('along').

× Uh, this is peer periods was great for me.

✓ Those periods were great for me.

The original is ungrammatical: 'this is peer periods was' mixes forms and unclear words. Replace with 'Those periods were great for me' to use correct demonstrative and past-tense verb for a past time. Suggestion: choose correct demonstrative (this/that/those) and ensure subject and verb agree in tense.

× Uh, this is experience. Help me today.

✓ That experience helps me today.

The original splits and misorders clauses. Use a single sentence with subject + verb: 'That experience helps me today.' 'Helps' is present tense to indicate current relevance. Suggestion: combine fragments into one coherent sentence and use present tense for current effects.

× Of course, uh, in my country, most of, uh, most people enjoy riding a bike.

✓ Of course, in my country most people enjoy riding bikes.

Minor redundancy 'most of, uh, most people' should be streamlined. Also use plural 'bikes' for general statements about people using them. Suggestion: remove filler and use concise present simple for habitual facts.

× Uh, there are many beautiful park in my country.

✓ There are many beautiful parks in my country.

'Park' should be plural 'parks' because 'many' requires a plural noun. Also keep plural agreement with 'are'. Suggestion: match quantifier 'many' with plural noun.

× So many people enjoy riding a bike in the many park.

✓ So many people enjoy riding bikes in the many parks.

The phrase 'the many park' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'parks' and remove the article 'the' when speaking generally: 'in many parks.' Also use plural 'bikes' for general activity. Suggestion: for general statements, use 'many parks' not 'the many park'.

× Uh, this experience help them, uh, improve their energy.

✓ This experience helps them improve their energy.

Subject-verb agreement: singular subject 'experience' requires 'helps' in present simple. Also do not split infinitive; 'helps them improve' is correct. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject and use base verb after 'help'.

× I think they're.

✓ I think they are.

The original 'I think they're.' is a trailing fragment; it ends abruptly. Expand to a full clause. If meaning 'I think they are' (happy/healthy/etc.), specify complement. At minimum write 'I think they are.' Suggestion: avoid leaving sentences as unfinished contractions; provide the complete idea.