Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb tense (past) and avoid repetition. For example, say you didn’t have a motorbike but had a special bicycle, explain why it was special, and finish with a short concluding remark.

예시: I didn’t have a motorbike as a child, but I did have a simple bicycle that was very special to me. For instance, I learned to ride it in my neighborhood park and I still keep it for sentimental reasons. Because of that, it reminds me of my childhood and I take care of it carefully.

제안: Provide a clear opinion first, then give two specific reasons with linking words and avoid filler words. Use correct quantifiers and smoother linking phrases (for example, "because", "for example", "also"). Mention concrete facts or examples rather than vague statements.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for daily commuting and weekend leisure rides. For example, every Sunday dozens of riders from nearby cities come to my town for group rides, and several friends work in the motorcycle industry, so I often learn about new models and events. Therefore, bikes play both practical and social roles here.

× No, I have not have any bike when I was child but I have a bicycle which is very special for me and till date now I have this bicycle and OK.

✓ No, I did not have any bike when I was a child, but I have a bicycle that is very special to me, and I still have it today.

The sentence mixes present perfect and simple past incorrectly ('have not have' is ungrammatical) and lacks articles ('a child'). Use simple past 'did not have' to match the time reference 'when I was a child'. Replace 'have a bicycle which is very special for me and till date now I have this bicycle' with 'I have a bicycle that is very special to me, and I still have it today' for clarity and correct idiomatic expression. Also add 'a' before 'child' and use 'to me' after 'special'.

× Yeah, bikes are very popular in my country 'cause every Sunday, uh, there are so much riders coming from different, different cities coming to my city and like my one of my friend is uh, currently doing job in Royal Enfield. So I know many things about bikes and all.

✓ Yeah, bikes are very popular in my country because every Sunday there are so many riders coming from different cities to my city, and one of my friends is currently working at Royal Enfield, so I know a lot about bikes.

Multiple errors: 'so much riders' is incorrect quantifier usage; use 'so many riders' (countable). 'Coming from different, different cities coming to my city' is redundant; simplify to 'coming from different cities to my city'. 'My one of my friend' is incorrect word order and article use; use 'one of my friends'. 'Doing job' is unnatural; use 'working at' or 'working for'. 'So I know many things about bikes and all' is informal; use 'I know a lot about bikes'. Also replace colloquial ''cause' with 'because' in formal correction.