Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate and natural: start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. whether you had a bike), avoid tense and grammar errors, reduce redundancy, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences. For example, correct tense (use past simple for past events), replace vague phrases like "whatever it is cold" with "even when it was cold", and use a linking word such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I bought it when I was 16 and loved practicing cycling every day. Even when it was cold in winter, I would ride across the street to improve my skills, so I became quite confident on two wheels.

제안: Clarify vocabulary and correct grammar: use the correct word "bikes" (not "bags"), use consistent tense and subject-verb agreement, and organize ideas with linking words (e.g. "also" and "moreover"). Provide a specific example such as shared-bike services or cultural reasons for popularity. Keep it concise and natural (2–4 sentences).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people owned bikes when they were children, and nowadays we also have public shared-bike services, which are very convenient for short trips. Because they are cheap and easy to use, lots of commuters prefer them.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was 16.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was 6.

The student likely meant childhood age; '16' is not typically 'a child' for the examiner's question. Use past simple 'had' is correct for past possession. If the intended age was 16, keep '16'; if childhood, change to a smaller age like '6'. Ensure factual accuracy.

× So I still remember that in the winter, whatever it is cold, I will ride my bike across the street to practice my cycling skills.

✓ I still remember that in winter, when it was cold, I would ride my bike across the street to practice my cycling skills.

Errors: tense sequence and modal use. The memory of habitual past actions should use past tense. 'Whatever it is cold' is incorrect; use 'when it was cold'. 'I will ride' is future/modal; for habitual past use 'would' or 'used to'. Therefore: 'when it was cold, I would ride' or 'I used to ride'.

× That's very fantastic.

✓ That was fantastic.

'Fantastic' is an adjective; 'very fantastic' is possible but sounds unnatural. Also the context is past memory, so use past tense 'was' instead of present 'is'. Use 'That was fantastic' or 'That was great'.

× Yes, the bags are very popular in our country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country.

The student used 'bags' instead of 'bikes' — a lexical/pronoun error likely due to mispronunciation or typo. Replace with the correct noun 'bikes' to match the question.

× We when we were child we also have an own bikes and in nowadays we have some public shared bags which can help us to get a bike when you want.

✓ When we were children we also had our own bikes, and nowadays we have some public shared bikes that let you get a bike when you want.

Multiple issues: word order and article/pronoun choice. 'We when we were child' should be 'When we were children'. 'We also have an own bikes' should be past simple 'we also had our own bikes' and possessive 'our' with plural 'bikes'. 'In nowadays' is incorrect; use 'nowadays'. 'Public shared bags' is wrong noun; use 'public shared bikes' or 'bike-sharing services'. Use relative clause 'that let you get a bike when you want' for clarity.

× Yes, it's very convenient.

✓ Yes, it's very convenient.

This sentence is correct: present tense 'it's' (it is) appropriately describes current convenience. No change needed.