Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (past tense and subject-verb agreement), shorten redundancy, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and limit to 2–4 short sentences. Mention one or two concise reasons (financial and lack of space) and, if relevant, a short personal feeling or consequence.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn't afford one because we had limited money, and Hong Kong is very crowded with little space to ride. As a result, I usually walked or used public transport to get around.

제안: Make the answer more fluent and complete: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting reasons using linking words (for example, because, therefore). Avoid fillers and finish the sentence. You can add a brief comparison or a consequence to enrich the response.

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in Hong Kong. This is because the public transport system is excellent and convenient, and the streets are often crowded, which makes cycling unsafe. Therefore most people prefer buses, MTR and walking instead of using bicycles.

× Well I didn't have a bike when I were a child as my family is quite poor family and we don't have much money to buy a bike and also in Hong Kong it's very small so also don't have a place and space for.

✓ Well, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family was quite poor and we didn't have enough money to buy a bike, and Hong Kong is very small so there wasn't much space for one.

Errors: 'were' should be 'was' to match singular subject 'I' (subject-verb agreement). 'is quite poor family' is incorrect word order and article use; change to 'was quite poor'. Tense consistency: describing past situation should use past tense 'didn't have' and 'wasn't'. Pronoun/verb agreement: 'we don't have' should be 'we didn't have'. Also unclear phrasing 'don't have a place and space for' corrected to 'there wasn't much space for one'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events, ensure subject-verb agreement (I was), and reorder nouns (a poor family -> my family was poor).

× Well, I think bike is not very popular in Hong Kong as Hong Kong has a very, I mean quite perfect, uh, transportation system.

✓ Well, I think bikes are not very popular in Hong Kong because Hong Kong has a very good, I mean quite a comprehensive, transportation system.

Errors: 'bike is' should be plural 'bikes are' to match general reference (singular/plural issue and subject-verb agreement). Word choice and article: 'quite perfect' is awkward; 'quite a comprehensive' or 'very good' fits better. Use 'because' not 'as' for clarity. Suggestion: use plural when speaking about things in general (bikes -> bikes are), choose appropriate adjectives, and keep phrasing concise.