Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, umm) and incomplete phrases. Also correct tense and article use: say “I didn’t have a bike” and “I wish I had one.”

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child, but I always wanted one. For example, my friends rode to the park every weekend, and I would watch them because I enjoyed outdoor activities and wanted the same freedom. Now I often think a bike would have helped me stay active and explore more nearby places.

제안: Give a clear direct answer and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, however, because) and avoid double negatives and fillers. Make comparisons clear and grammatical: e.g., 'Compared with the past, more people now use bikes.'

예시: Yes, bikes are increasingly popular in my country because more people care about fitness and the environment. For example, cities have built bike lanes and many commuters choose cycling for short trips. However, in the past fewer people cycled due to limited infrastructure and safety concerns.

× Unfortunately I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I wish I could have it because I think the childhood is the perfect time when you have fun and you spend a lot of time outside, do different activities and uh, bike is a perfect for your umm.

✓ Unfortunately I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I wish I had one because I think childhood is the perfect time to have fun; you spend a lot of time outside, do different activities, and a bike is perfect for that.

Multiple issues: use of 'could have it' is incorrect for expressing a past unreal wish — use past perfect or 'had' for a simple wish about possession in childhood; 'the childhood' uses unnecessary definite article — use 'childhood'; 'to have fun' fits better than 'when you have fun'; 'a bike is a perfect for your umm' has article and noun phrase errors — use 'a bike is perfect for that'. Suggestion: use 'I wish I had one' for a present regret about past, remove unnecessary 'the', and simplify the final clause to 'a bike is perfect for that'.

× Uh, I think yes, uh, they are becoming popular nowadays because people tend to lead a healthy lifestyle.

✓ Uh, yes, I think they are becoming popular nowadays because people tend to lead healthier lifestyles.

Stylistic and adjective/adverb choice: 'lead a healthy lifestyle' is grammatical but plural 'lifestyles' fits when referring to people in general; 'lead healthier lifestyles' is more natural to indicate a trend. This is an improvement rather than fixing a strict preposition error, but it addresses collocation and plurality. Suggestion: use comparative adjective 'healthier' and plural 'lifestyles' when speaking about a general shift among people.

× Uh, comparing with umm, educate a goal, there was a different situation because umm, almost, uh, none of people didn't uh, wish to.

✓ Compared with the past, the situation was different because almost no one wanted to.

Multiple grammar problems: 'comparing with' should be 'compared with' (past reference); 'educate a goal' is unclear and likely incorrect — replaced with 'the past'; double negative 'none of people didn't' is incorrect — use 'almost no one' or 'none of the people did'; sentence fragment and missing verb at end — add 'wanted to' with object omitted in original so use general 'wanted to' meaning 'wanted to have bikes' if context requires. Suggestion: use 'Compared with the past, the situation was different because almost no one wanted to have a bike.' if you want to specify the object.