Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, accurate and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I did.), then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid confusing terms (bike vs motorbike) and unnecessary words. Use linking words if adding details (for example, on my 10th birthday). Keep to a maximum of 3–4 short sentences and correct small grammar mistakes (e.g., “was gifted” → “was a gift” or “my parents gifted me a bike”).

예시: Yes, I did. My parents gifted me a bike when I was a child. For example, on my 10th birthday I received a small black Honda motorbike model, which I rode around the neighborhood.

제안: Give a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons or examples using linking words. Remove filled pauses like “uh” and avoid repeating the same idea. Use one linking word such as “because” or “for example” to add coherence. Try to include a specific type of bike or a reason for popularity (cost, convenience, culture).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and easy to park. For example, many commuters use scooters and small motorcycles to avoid traffic, and there is a wide variety from basic bicycles to modern scooters.

× Yes, I had a bike where in my childhood it was gifted by my parents.

✓ Yes, I had a bike in my childhood; it was a gift from my parents.

The original sentence has awkward word order and redundant phrasing ('where in my childhood' is incorrect). This is a sentence structure issue: rearrange phrases for natural English and use 'a gift from my parents' rather than 'gifted by my parents' for clarity. Suggestion: place time expression 'in my childhood' before or after the main clause and use a clear clause connector (semicolon or conjunction).

× On my 10th birthday I had black Honda motorbike.

✓ On my 10th birthday I had a black Honda motorbike.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'black Honda motorbike', which is required for singular countable nouns. This is a singular/plural (article) issue. Add 'a' and include 'a' before the adjective-noun phrase: 'a black Honda motorbike'.

× I think bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in my country.

This sentence is correct. 'Bikes' as a plural noun needs no article here. No change necessary.

× Uh, people are, uh, fond of riding bikes.

✓ People are fond of riding bikes.

The original contains filler 'uh' which should be removed in a written response. Grammatically, 'fond of riding bikes' is correct (fond of + -ing). This suggestion removes hesitation words to improve clarity.

× You can find a variety of bikes in my country.

✓ You can find a variety of bikes in my country.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present general truth context. No change necessary.