Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời đã rõ ràng nhưng cần chỉnh ngữ pháp, mạch văn và sử dụng liên từ phù hợp để tự nhiên hơn. Chú ý: (1) Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như 'to celebrate me first joining' -> 'to celebrate my starting' hoặc 'to celebrate my first day at school'. (2) Dùng liên từ và chia câu hợp lý để tránh câu quá dài: tách thành câu chủ đề + câu bổ trợ. (3) Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: tuổi lúc nhận, màu xe, hoặc kỷ niệm ngắn) để phong phú nội dung mà vẫn giữ tối đa 5 câu.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a small red bicycle to celebrate my first day at elementary school when I was six. I rode it every day to get to class, and sometimes I cycled to my friend’s house after school. I loved the freedom it gave me and remember falling once but getting back up quickly.

제안: Ý chính rõ nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp, thứ tự từ và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc. Lưu ý: (1) Sửa cấu trúc lỗi như 'almost everyone on a bike on the street' -> 'almost everyone rode a bike' và 'rising up the motorcycle and cars' -> 'the rise of motorcycles and cars'. (2) Thêm lý do cụ thể ngắn gọn và một so sánh để câu phong phú hơn. (3) Giữ câu ngắn, dùng linking words như 'however' hoặc 'nowadays' để chuyển ý rõ ràng.

예시: Yes, bikes used to be very popular; almost everyone rode a bicycle on the streets. However, nowadays they are less common because more people can afford motorcycles and cars. As a result, cycling is now more of a hobby or exercise activity than a main mode of transport.

× It was a gift from my parents to celebrate me first joining the elementary school.

✓ It was a gift from my parents to celebrate my first joining elementary school.

The original sentence uses an incorrect object form 'me' after 'celebrate'. After verbs like 'celebrate', a noun phrase or gerund phrase should be used. 'My first joining elementary school' uses a possessive adjective before a gerund-like phrase to show the event. A more natural phrasing would be 'to celebrate my starting elementary school.' Suggestion: use 'my' before the gerund/verb-noun or rephrase to 'to celebrate my starting elementary school.'

× Ever since I used it every day to travel to school and also to visit my friend.

✓ Ever since, I used it every day to travel to school and also to visit my friend.

The sentence lacks correct temporal connector punctuation and 'Ever since' should be followed by a comma when starting a clause. However the main grammatical issue is awkward aspect: when 'ever since' refers to a past starting point continuing to another past or present, it's better to use present perfect: 'Ever since, I have used it every day...'. Suggestion: use present perfect 'have used' if the habit continued into present: 'Ever since, I have used it every day...'.

× In the past, yes it was very popular that almost everyone on a bike on the street back then, but now it is not as popular as it used to be because of the rising up the motorcycle and cars.

✓ In the past, yes it was very popular; almost everyone was on a bike on the street back then, but now it is not as popular as it used to be because of the rise of motorcycles and cars.

Multiple past-tense and word choice errors: 'almost everyone on a bike' lacks the past-tense verb 'was' for the subject, so add 'was'. 'Rising up the motorcycle and cars' is incorrect collocation; use noun 'rise' and plural 'motorcycles', and use 'of' to link: 'the rise of motorcycles and cars.' Also punctuation: separate clauses with a semicolon or period. Suggestion: use 'was' after 'everyone' and replace 'rising up' with 'the rise of' and correct plurals.