Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is short, unclear and contains phrases that seem incorrect or unrelated (e.g. "bra broth"). To improve: 1) Give a clear direct topic sentence stating whether you had a bike. 2) Add 1–2 specific supporting details (age, who gave it, where you rode it) using linking words like "and" or "because." 3) Avoid unrelated words and aim for natural phrasing. Keep response to no more than 4–5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a bright blue Pathak bike that my parents bought for me when I was eight, and I rode it to visit my friends in the neighborhood. I remember practicing on the quiet streets near our house because I wanted to learn quickly. Those rides gave me a lot of confidence and happy memories.

제안: Your answer is vague and contains unclear fragments ("Maybe read about it", "Let's let's, let's make people"). To improve: 1) Start with a clear opinion (Yes/No) and briefly explain why. 2) Provide one or two specific reasons or examples (health benefits, cost, traffic). 3) Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to make your response coherent. Keep sentences natural and avoid repetitions.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because more people are concerned about health and the environment. For example, many cities have added bike lanes and bike-sharing schemes, so commuting by bicycle is convenient and affordable. As a result, cycling has become a common choice for short trips and exercise.

× I once had a cool Pathak bicycle and a bra broth. Lots of rich experience for me.

✓ I once had a cool Pathak bicycle and a barrow. It was a very rich experience for me.

The original sentence uses incorrect word choices that make the meaning unclear (bra broth is not correct English). Replace with appropriate nouns: 'barrow' (if the student meant a type of cart) or another intended word; here 'barrow' fits better. Also the second fragment 'Lots of rich experience for me' is a sentence fragment and awkward. Change to a full sentence: 'It was a very rich experience for me.' This fixes sentence structure and provides a clear subject and verb. Suggested improvement: choose precise vocabulary and write complete sentences with a subject and verb.

× Yes, I think so. Maybe read about it. It's become a trend of healthy. Let's let's, let's make people.

✓ Yes, I think so. You may have read about it. It has become a healthy trend. Let's encourage people to take part.

Multiple issues: 'Maybe read about it' is a fragment and incorrect verb form; change to 'You may have read about it' (modal + perfect). 'It's become a trend of healthy' is ungrammatical: use present perfect 'It has become' and correct noun phrase 'a healthy trend.' 'Let's let's, let's make people' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'Let's encourage people to take part' to express the likely intended meaning. These corrections fix verb usage, tense, article and adjective order, and sentence completeness. Suggested improvement: use complete clauses, correct tense forms (present perfect for recent changes), place adjectives before nouns ('healthy trend'), and use clear verbs for intended actions.