Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and reduce fillers (umm, uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy (e.g., avoid repeating 'how to').

예시: Yes — I had a bike when I was in primary school. My mother taught me how to ride it, and I remember practicing every afternoon until I felt confident. As a result, I became independent and often rode to friends’ houses.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a comparison. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., 'I used to go to Denmark' is incorrect here). Use linking words like 'however' or 'in contrast' to structure the comparison.

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. In contrast to places like Denmark, where cycling is common for daily travel, many people here prefer cars or public transport because cities are crowded and cycling infrastructure is limited.

× Yes, of course. I still remember it was in my primary school.

✓ Yes, of course. I still remember that it was when I was in primary school.

The original sentence lacks proper clause connectors and tense for the time reference. Use 'that' to introduce the remembered clause and 'when I was in primary school' to indicate time clearly; 'was in my primary school' is unnatural without 'when' and the subject 'I'. Suggestion: Use 'I still remember that it was when I was in primary school' or more naturally 'I still remember being in primary school.'

× My mom, umm, taught me how to, uh, how to ride a bicycle.

✓ My mom taught me how to ride a bicycle.

The sentence has filler words and a redundant 'how to'. Remove hesitation fillers and the repeated 'how to'. Also 'a bicycle' is acceptable; no definite article change required other than removing hesitations. Suggestion: Keep sentences concise: 'My mom taught me how to ride a bicycle.'

× And that's the time I got my own back.

✓ And that's when I got my own bike.

'Got my own back' is an idiom meaning revenge, which is incorrect here. The intended meaning is obtaining a bicycle; use 'bike' not 'back', and 'that's when' fits time reference. Suggestion: Say 'That's when I got my own bike.'

× Uh, I don't think so because I used one, went to Denmark which is quite famous for bicycle.

✓ Uh, I don't think so, because when I went to Denmark, which is quite famous for bicycles, I noticed many people used bikes.

Original mixes tenses and has incorrect verb use 'used one, went to Denmark'. It needs a clear temporal clause: 'when I went to Denmark'. Also 'bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' in this context. Clarify subject and verb: 'I noticed many people used bikes.' Suggestion: Use clear clauses and plural nouns: 'When I went to Denmark, which is famous for bicycles, I noticed many people use bikes.'

× Compared to that, I think Chinese people are more likely to more like to travel by cars or public transport.

✓ Compared to that, I think Chinese people are more likely to travel by car or use public transport.

Original has redundant 'more likely to more like to' and wrong quantifier 'cars' after 'by'. Use singular 'by car' for the mode of transport and simpler structure 'more likely to travel by car or use public transport.' Suggestion: Remove redundancy and use correct collocations: 'more likely to travel by car or use public transport.'