Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (use past tense), remove fillers (umm), make answer more natural and concise, and add one brief supporting detail using a linking word. For example, start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give a specific detail or reason. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child I had a four-wheeled bike because I was still learning to balance. However, I never learned to ride a two-wheeled bicycle properly, so I still can’t ride one now.

제안: Clarify meaning and use precise vocabulary (popular vs common), avoid hesitations, and organize the answer: give a direct opinion, then support it with a specific example using linking words (e.g., however, because). Be concise and coherent; explain the bike-sharing system if relevant.

예시: I don’t think bicycles are very common nationwide. However, in my hometown there is a bike-sharing scheme, so many people rent bikes for short trips because public transport is limited. Therefore, cycling is more popular locally than in other parts of the country.

× When I was a child I have a bike with umm, 4 wheels, but now I don't know how to ride a bike.

✓ When I was a child I had a bike with four wheels, but now I don't know how to ride a bike.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was a child') so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Have' is present tense; change to 'had' to match the past context. Also write numbers in words in formal writing and remove filler words like 'umm'. Suggestion: use past simple for actions or possessions in the past and avoid filler words when speaking or writing.

× I suppose that is not very famous, uh, type of transport in my country, but in my hometown umm, citizens can take a bike umm, for payment and due to. Then things.

✓ I suppose that it is not a very popular type of transport in my country, but in my hometown citizens can rent bikes for a fee.

Multiple issues: 'famous' is not the correct adjective for describing transport popularity; use 'popular'. The phrase needed an article: 'a very popular type'. 'Take a bike for payment' is awkward and ungrammatical — use 'rent bikes for a fee' or 'hire bikes for a fee'. Remove filler words 'uh' and 'umm' and the fragment 'due to. Then things' which is meaningless. Suggestion: choose precise adjectives (popular), include necessary articles, and use standard verbs like 'rent' or 'hire' with 'for a fee' to express paid service.