Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and count nouns (e.g., 'there were many steep slopes'), remove filler words (uh), and add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word to connect reason and consequence.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike. I grew up in a coastal city where there were many steep slopes, so most people preferred walking or taking public transport instead. For example, my family always used the bus because cycling uphill was difficult and time-consuming.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, correct tense and chronology, avoid repetition and fillers, and add one specific example or statistic to support your point. Use linking words (e.g., 'however', 'nowadays') to show change over time.

예시: Yes, bikes are popular in China. Historically it was known as the 'Kingdom of Bicycles' in the 1980s and 1990s; however, popularity waned for a while but has returned nowadays thanks to shared bike services. For instance, companies like Ofo and Mobike introduced millions of dockless bikes in cities, making cycling convenient for short trips.

× No, I didn't have a bike because I grew up in a coastal city where there is so many steep slopes and ups and downs, uh, that uh, most of our citizens, uh, used to walking or taking past public transport instead biking.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike because I grew up in a coastal city where there are so many steep slopes and ups and downs that most of our citizens used to walk or take public transport instead of biking.

Errors: 'there is so many' should be 'there are so many' because 'slopes and ups and downs' is plural (singular/plural agreement). 'used to walking' is incorrect: after 'used to' use the base verb 'walk'. 'taking past public transport' is incorrect phrasing: use 'take public transport'. 'instead biking' needs the preposition 'of' and the gerund: 'instead of biking'. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb number agreement for there + plural noun (there are), use 'used to' + base verb, use correct verb 'take' with 'public transport', and use 'instead of' before a gerund.

× Yes, uh, I live in China and uh, China was called the Kingdom of bicycles in 1980. So 1990s, uh, and nowadays with the popularity of shared bike services and it's also really popular.

✓ Yes, I live in China. China was called the 'Kingdom of Bicycles' in the 1980s and the 1990s, and nowadays, with the popularity of shared bike services, bicycles are also really popular.

Errors: tense and time expression issues. 'in 1980. So 1990s' is inconsistent; use 'in the 1980s and the 1990s' for decades. 'it's also really popular' is vague and mismatched subject; refer to 'bicycles' as plural and use plural verb 'are'. Suggestions: use correct decade format ('the 1980s'), keep consistent tense when describing past facts ('was called'), and match subject and verb number when returning to present state ('bicycles are').