Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep answers concise and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary filler words (e.g., "because" repeated, "umm").

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Because my family couldn’t afford one, I usually travelled to school by bus or shared rides with neighbours. As a result, I didn’t learn to ride until I was a teenager.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and then provide two clear reasons with smooth linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "affordability", "convenience", "customization") and avoid hesitations. Finish the sentence with a concrete example or brief result.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Mainly because they are affordable and convenient for short trips, many people choose them over cars. Moreover, some riders personalise their bikes with accessories, such as storage boxes or colourful decals, to suit their tastes.

× No, we don't have a bike.

✓ No, we didn't have a bike.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so the student should use past tense. Using 'don't have' (present simple) is inconsistent. Use 'didn't have' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: When referring to past situations, use past simple verbs (e.g., 'didn't have').

× When I was young, because we were not financially dependent or our financial condition was not that good, so it was difficult for us to own a bike.

✓ When I was young, because our financial condition was not good, it was difficult for us to own a bike.

The original sentence is wordy and contains redundant conjunctions ('because' and 'so') and an incorrect phrase 'financially dependent' (likely intended 'financially well-off'). This creates a sentence structure error. Remove redundant connectors and use appropriate adjectives. Suggestion: Use a single causal connector and concise phrasing (e.g., 'because our financial condition was not good').

× So we used to travel by buses or other public transport, but we don't have a bike.

✓ So we used to travel by buses or other public transport, but we didn't have a bike.

The first clause correctly uses 'used to' for past habitual action, but the second clause incorrectly uses present tense 'don't have'. To maintain past reference, use 'didn't have'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent within the same time frame: 'used to... but didn't...'.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because umm, because of the financial dependency and the availability of uh, good disposable income, make the people buy their own bikes, uh, or, which they prefer more, and according to their preferences, they even the some people also customize the bike according to the.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because of increased disposable income, which makes people buy their own bikes. Some people also customize their bikes according to their preferences.

Multiple problems: tense and agreement issues ('make the people buy' should be 'which makes people buy'), awkward phrase 'financial dependency' (incorrect word choice), redundant fillers and fragmented ending. The corrected version uses present simple appropriately for a general statement, matches subject-verb agreement ('which makes'), and removes redundancies. Suggestion: For general facts use present simple and ensure subject-verb agreement; replace incorrect nouns with 'disposable income' and simplify sentence into two clear sentences.