Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap net ama karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları var; cümleler gereksiz tekrarlar içeriyor ve anlam belirsizliği var. Daha kısa, doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kurun, ardından bir-iki destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak mantıksal akışı sağlayın. Örneğin bisikletin boyutu, rengi ve sonrasında ne yaptığınız (örneğin tekerleklerini çıkardığınız veya büyüdüğünüz için bıraktığınız) gibi somut detaylar verin. Tekrarları ve anlamsal bozuklukları çıkarın, zaman kiplerine dikkat edin.

예시: Yes, I had a small children’s bike when I was young. It was bright red and had training wheels, which made learning to ride easier. After a few years I removed the training wheels and used the bike until I outgrew it.

제안: Cevap anlaşılır fakat bazı dilbilgisi ve mantık hataları var; örneğin 'not much in Europe' ifadesi burada kafa karıştırıcı. Cümleleri daha mantıklı sırayla düzenleyin: genel görüşünüzü söyleyin, sonra şehir ve ülke farkını açıklayın. Daha doğru gramer kullanımı (örn. 'people who ride' değil 'people who ride' ve 'there are many people') ve bağlaçlarla akışı iyileştirin. Somut örnekler veya karşılaştırmalar ekleyin (örn. trafik, ulaşım seçenekleri).

예시: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country, especially in smaller towns and among students. However, in big cities people tend to prefer cars or buses because distances are long and traffic is heavy. In contrast, cycling is more common in some European cities with dedicated bike lanes.

× I saw a lot of people who riding a bike in the city, but not much in Europe.

✓ I saw a lot of people who were riding bikes in the city, but not many in Europe.

The original sentence omits the auxiliary verb 'were' before the present participle 'riding', creating an incorrect clause. Use the past continuous 'were riding' to match the past reference 'I saw'. Also 'a bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match 'a lot of people', and 'not much in Europe' should be 'not many in Europe' because 'many' is used with countable nouns like people. Suggested improvement: include the correct auxiliary verb with -ing forms and match countable/plural noun forms.

× Yes, I did and it was like a not huge one, but the bike for the kids, you know, the average size it was paying.

✓ Yes, I did. It was not very big; it was a typical kids' bike, the average size.

The original sentence is disfluent and contains incorrect word order and word choice ('like a not huge one', 'it was paying'). Simplify into clear clauses: 'It was not very big' and 'it was a typical kids' bike'. Use the possessive form 'kids' bike' and concise phrasing. Suggested improvement: break ideas into shorter sentences, choose correct adjective order and avoid filler words like 'like' in formal statements.

× There's a sparkle and it was for real.

✓ It had a sparkle and it looked real.

The original mixes present 'There's' with past 'it was', causing tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. Use past tense throughout to match the context ('had' and 'looked'). Also 'for real' is informal; 'looked real' is clearer. Suggested improvement: maintain consistent tense and use clearer verbs.

× So this is so a kid bike and then after years I just took off the two of them because two of them is a.

✓ So this was a kid's bike, and after a few years I removed the two training wheels because they were worn out.

The original is fragmented, uses incorrect tense and unclear reference ('two of them is a'). Use past tense 'was' and clarify what 'two of them' refers to (training wheels). 'Took off' is colloquial; 'removed' is clearer, and 'they were worn out' explains reason. Suggested improvement: clarify the subject, keep consistent tense, and complete the reason clause.

× Yes, they are, because I saw a lot of people who riding a bike in the city, but not much in Europe.

✓ Yes, they are, because I saw a lot of people riding bikes in the city, but not many in Europe.

The pronoun/quantifier 'much' is incorrect for countable nouns like 'people' or 'bikes'; use 'many'. Also 'who riding' lacks the auxiliary verb; use 'riding' without 'who' or 'who were riding'. Suggested improvement: use appropriate quantifiers for countable nouns and correct clause structure with or without 'who' plus auxiliary.

× Uh, in my city especially, there's so many people who use a car because it's a huge city, so you have to have a car or you have to use a bus.

✓ In my city especially, there are so many people who use a car because it's a huge city, so you need to have a car or use a bus.

Use 'there are' (plural) instead of 'there's' to match plural 'many people' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'have to have a car' is redundant; 'need to have a car' or 'you have to own a car' is clearer. Change 'you have to use a bus' to 'use a bus' for parallel structure. Suggested improvement: ensure subject-verb agreement with 'there is/there are' and maintain parallelism in coordinated verbs.