Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repeating words (e.g., "bike" twice) and fix tense/word order errors ("my parents gave me a bike" rather than "gifted me a ride a bike"). Keep responses under five sentences.

예시: Yes. I had a bike from the age of five, and it quickly became my favorite toy. My parents gave me the bike as a birthday present, and because we lived in a house with a large yard, I could ride every morning. As a result, I became confident riding on the road by the time I was eight.

제안: Give a direct opinion, then support it with two clear specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, moreover, because) and correct small grammar issues ("people ride bikes", "bike marathons"). Avoid filler words like "right" and repetitions like "really, really." Keep it within four sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Armenia because many people use them for exercise and leisure. For example, there are frequent bike marathons and community rides that attract families and young people. Moreover, even public figures promote cycling, which encourages more people to take part.

× Riding a bike was my favorite activity to do when I was a child.

✓ Riding a bike was my favorite activity when I was a child.

The phrase 'activity to do' is redundant. Use the gerund 'Riding' as the noun and follow with 'was my favorite activity' for clarity and natural phrasing.

× When I turned 5 years old, my parents gifted me a ride a bike and I think it was my favorite gift ever because from that day on I started riding a bike bike every day in the mornings and as we live in a house, not an apartment, then we have a big yard I have the opportunity to ride as long as.

✓ When I turned five, my parents gave me a bike, and I think it was my favorite gift ever because from that day on I started riding a bike every morning. Because we live in a house with a big yard, I had the opportunity to ride for as long as I wanted.

Multiple issues: 'gifted me a ride a bike' is ungrammatical—use 'gave me a bike' (simple past). Remove duplicate 'bike bike'. Use 'every morning' instead of 'every day in the mornings'. The long run-on sentence needs to be split and restructured for clarity. Use 'Because we live in a house with a big yard' and 'had the opportunity to ride for as long as I wanted' to convey ability in the past.

× I would say yes. Even the president of my country likes to ride a bike with a lot of other people ride a bike too.

✓ I would say yes. Even the president of my country likes to ride a bike, and a lot of other people ride bikes too.

The clause 'a lot of other people ride a bike too' has subject-verb agreement and article issues. Use plural 'ride bikes' for general statement, and connect clauses with 'and'. Keep third person singular 'likes' for 'the president' which is correct.

× But The thing is that people in Armenia, right, like to make marathons of riding a bikes.

✓ But the thing is that people in Armenia like to organize bike marathons.

Capitalization: 'The' should be lowercase. 'Make marathons of riding a bikes' is awkward and ungrammatical—use 'organize bike marathons' or 'take part in cycling marathons'. Also correct 'a bikes' to 'bike' or use plural 'marathons' appropriately.

× And it is very interesting and good because it's a good and healthy activity and it is just a fun activity that people like to do together, to make memories, to spend, really, really.

✓ And it is very interesting and good because it's a healthy and fun activity that people like to do together to make memories and spend time with each other.

The original repeats 'good' and ends with an incomplete phrase 'to spend, really, really.' Replace redundancy with 'healthy and fun', complete the idea with 'spend time with each other.' Use pronoun 'each other' to clarify the mutual activity.