Part 1
시험관
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
수험생
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
시험관
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
수험생
No, I do not think from my personal experience that bikes are popular in my country because it has not been long since bike roads have been like done by the government so it has become more popular than it was before. But no it is not as per say popular.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
점수: 30.0제안: Give a direct answer to the question first (Yes/No) and then add 1–2 specific supporting details. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences) and use linking words (e.g., "because", "so", "but"). Avoid repeating the examiner's question and reduce hesitation. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g., "bike lanes" instead of "bike roads").
예시: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. I used it almost every day to ride to my friend’s house and to the nearby park because my neighborhood was quiet and safe. However, I stopped using it often when I started secondary school and began commuting by bus.
× No, I do not think from my personal experience that bikes are popular in my country because it has not been long since bike roads have been like done by the government so it has become more popular than it was before.
✓ No, I do not think, based on my personal experience, that bikes are popular in my country, because it has not been long since the government built bike lanes, so they have become more popular than before.
Problems: sentence structure issues and incorrect tense and awkward phrasing. 'It has not been long since' requires a past action (built bike lanes) described with simple past or present perfect; 'bike roads have been like done by the government' is ungrammatical. Suggested correction uses 'the government built bike lanes' or 'the government has built bike lanes' and replaces awkward 'like done' with 'built' and makes pronoun reference clear ('they' refers to bikes or bike usage). Also added commas to improve clarity and flow. Ensure consistent tense: use present perfect for recent changes ('has not been long since the government has built') or simple past ('since the government built'); both are acceptable depending on nuance.
× But no it is not as per say popular.
✓ But no, it is not, as such, very popular.
Problems: incorrect idiom 'as per say' (should be 'as such' or 'per se') and poor sentence punctuation. Corrected version uses 'as such' and adds 'very' for natural emphasis. Also added commas for clarity. Suggestion: use established idioms ('per se' or 'as such') and include appropriate adverbs for degree.