Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details in logical order using linking words. Correct grammar (tense, articles, word order) and avoid redundant phrases. Aim for 2–4 sentences, e.g. state when you got the bike, why you received it, and one brief detail about learning to ride.

예시: Yes — I had a bike as a child. My mother bought it for me when I was in third grade because I promised to study hard and I came second in class. I practiced every day and soon learned to ride confidently on our street.

제안: Give a clear opinion followed by two specific reasons supported by examples or comparisons. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore, however). Fix grammar (use plural/singular correctly, articles) and avoid unclear phrases like “compute other countries.” Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheaper and easier to park than cars. For example, many commuters choose scooters to avoid traffic during rush hour, so they reach their destinations faster and spend less on fuel.

× I as I remember my mother bought me a bike when I was in 3rd standard as I positioned second in class as I promised and I practiced day and night until I knew how to ride a bike in I guess today's.

✓ As I remember, my mother bought me a bike when I was in 3rd standard because I finished second in the class; I promised to practice and I practiced day and night until I knew how to ride a bike, I guess by that day.

The sentence contains multiple tense and phrasing problems. Use simple past for completed past actions (bought, finished/positioned, practiced, knew). Replace unclear phrases ("as I positioned second" -> "because I finished second") and fix word order. Split into clearer clauses using commas and a semicolon. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and simplify structure.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country as many of the users are bike instead of cars and bus.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because many people use bikes instead of cars and buses.

The original has incorrect noun phrases and word order ("many of the users are bike"). Use 'people use bikes' and pluralize 'bus' to 'buses'. Use 'because' for cause. Suggestion: use subject 'people' and verb 'use' with correct plural nouns.

× Many people usually prefer bikes and scooter as it is efficient and we can reach faster to our destination and compute other countries.

✓ Many people usually prefer bikes and scooters because they are efficient and help us reach our destinations faster than in other countries.

Errors: 'scooter' should be plural 'scooters'; pronoun agreement ('it' -> 'they') for plural subjects; awkward phrase 'reach faster to our destination' -> 'reach our destinations faster'; 'and compute other countries' is nonsensical — likely intended 'compared to other countries'. Suggestion: ensure plural agreement and use correct comparative phrase 'than in other countries'.

× Yes, our country uses more bikes.

✓ Yes, people in our country use bikes more.

Saying 'our country uses more bikes' incorrectly attributes the action to the country. Rephrase to 'people in our country use bikes more' for correct subject. Also 'more' needs a comparative context; placing it after 'use' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: make the subject human and reposition 'more'.

× I as I remember my mother bought me a bike when I was in 3rd standard as I positioned second in class as I promised and I practiced day and night until I knew how to ride a bike in I guess today's.

✓ As I remember, my mother bought me a bike when I was in 3rd standard because I finished second in the class; I promised to practice, so I practiced day and night until I learned to ride a bike, I guess by that day.

This repeats earlier sentence but with alternative correction focusing on clearer conjunctions: use 'because' for reason, 'finished second' for position, 'learned to ride' instead of 'knew how to ride', and tidy temporal phrase 'by that day'. Suggestion: break long run-on sentence into shorter clauses and use appropriate connecting words.