Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by making the language more natural, correcting small grammatical errors, and adding one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it concise (no more than five sentences). For example, correct articles and tense (“bought a new one” not “bought new one”) and add a brief detail about what made it special (e.g., where you rode it or who taught you).

예시: Yes — I had a bike as a child. My dad bought a new one for my eighth birthday, and I still remember how excited I was. Because I had wanted to ride for a long time, I spent the whole afternoon practicing in the park, and my neighbour taught me how to balance. It was one of the happiest days of my childhood.

제안: Your response communicates an opinion but is disorganized and contains repeated words and unclear phrases. Improve coherence by using a clear topic sentence, linking words, correct grammar, and specific examples. Avoid repetition (e.g., remove duplicated words) and fix unclear references (“I'm Saddam” seems incorrect). Give a concise comparison and a reason or example to support your view.

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Although you sometimes see people cycling in parks, most people prefer cars for daily travel because public transport is limited and distances are long. For instance, in the city where I live, commuting by car is much faster than cycling, so few people ride bikes to work.

× My dad bought new one for my 8th birthday and I remember that day.

✓ My dad bought a new one for my 8th birthday and I remember that day.

Missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'new one' is an article error affecting past tense narrative; add 'a' to make the noun phrase grammatically correct. Suggestion: use 'a new one' when mentioning a single, non-specific item.

× I mean, occasionally I do see some people riding their bikes here and there, but in general, and I believe that there will be more people in I'm Saddam who who drive a bike either to go to work or anything.

✓ I mean, occasionally I do see some people riding their bikes here and there, but in general, I believe that there will be more people in my city, like in Saddam, who will ride a bike either to go to work or for other things.

Multiple issues: incorrect phrase 'in I'm Saddam' (pronoun/article/preposition misuse) and repetition 'who who'; tense and modal consistency for future prediction requires 'will ride' rather than 'drive' for bikes; 'for anything' is informal/unclear and should be 'for other things.' Suggestions: replace 'I'm Saddam' with 'my city, like in Saddam' or the correct place name, remove duplicate words, use 'will ride' for future, and use 'for other things' for clarity.

× But in in city I live in, they just use their cars.

✓ But in the city I live in, they just use their cars.

Double 'in' is a repetition error and missing definite article 'the' before 'city' is incorrect; correct form is 'in the city I live in.' Suggestion: use 'the city I live in' to specify the particular city.