Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (use past tense consistently) and avoid awkward phrases like "it's sounded good." Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because," "so").

예시: No, I didn't have a bike as a child. I really wanted one because I loved being outdoors and imagined riding to nearby rivers and through the trees. Because I couldn't ride, I often walked to those places with my family.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then add a specific reason and an example. Fix grammar and phrasing (e.g., "they are popular" not "it"; avoid repetition). Use linking words like "because" and "for example." Keep to 2–3 sentences and be precise.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances. For example, many people use them to commute to work or run errands in crowded city areas, since bikes are often faster than cars during rush hour.

× No, I didn't, but I wanted it very much because I always wanted to see nature, rivers and trees around me, so it's sounded good.

✓ No, I didn't, but I wanted one very much because I always wanted to see the nature, rivers, and trees around me, so it sounded good.

The phrase 'it's sounded good' is incorrect because 'sounded' is a past tense/past participle and cannot be used with the present auxiliary 'is'. This is a problem with past participle/verb form usage. Use either simple past 'it sounded good' to match the past time frame, or 'it sounded like a good idea' for clarity. Additionally, 'wanted it' is better as 'wanted one' (singular noun reference) and add commas and 'the' before 'nature' to be natural. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (simple past) and use correct noun reference and articles. Suggested improvements: replace 'it's sounded' with 'it sounded', use 'one' instead of 'it' for clarity, and add 'the' before 'nature' and commas between list items.

× Yes, I do think they are popular in my country and not only in my country but around the world because it's a really convenient means of transport you can get everywhere in an in really fast

✓ Yes, I do think they are popular in my country and not only there but also around the world because they are a really convenient means of transport; you can get everywhere quickly.

This sentence has multiple structure problems: 'not only in my country but around the world' is better with parallel form ('not only there but also around the world'), 'it's a really convenient means of transport' is wrong because 'means' is plural and needs a plural pronoun and verb ('they are'), and the final clause 'you can get everywhere in an in really fast' contains word order and extra words errors. These are sentence structure and agreement issues. Suggestions: maintain parallel structure, match subject and verb number with 'means' (use 'they are'), remove extra words ('in an in'), and use 'quickly' or 'very fast' at the end for correct adverb placement.