Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations and filler words (uh), correct small grammar issues (e.g., "when I was 6" or "when I was in sixth grade"). Keep answers to no more than five sentences and use linking words for coherence (for example, "because" or "so").

예시: Yes, I did. When I was six (in sixth grade) my father bought me a pink bike with purple tyres and training wheels. I loved it because it was smooth to ride and the bright colours made it special, so I often rode it after finishing my schoolwork.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion sentence ("Yes, bikes are popular") then give two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words ("because", "also"). Avoid repetition and incorrect statements (bikes do use fuel if motorcycles do; clarify whether you mean bicycles). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "bicycles", "motorbikes", "fuel-efficient"). Reduce hesitations and fix subject-verb agreement ("bikes are", not "this bikes are").

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. This is because they are more convenient than cars for short trips and there are many dedicated bike lanes, so commuting is faster. Also, bicycles are environmentally friendly since they produce no emissions, and they are easier to park and cheaper to maintain.

× Yes, when I was of 6 uh, when I was in 6th grade, my father bought me a bike which was of pink colour with two beautiful trainings and tyres of purple colour.

✓ Yes, when I was 6, when I was in 6th grade, my father bought me a pink bike with two beautiful training wheels and purple tyres.

Errors: 'was of 6' is incorrect; use 'was 6' for age (Grammar problem type 26: sentence structure but fits present participle? However per list it matches general structure). 'which was of pink colour' is wordy and awkward; use 'a pink bike' (article and adjective order). 'trainings' is incorrect; correct term is 'training wheels' (noun phrase). Suggestions: say 'when I was 6' or 'when I was in 6th grade', use 'a pink bike', use 'training wheels' and 'tyres' or 'tires' depending on variety of English.

× I love it because of its colours and how it's smooth uh, gives the right I whenever I get free from my school work.

✓ I loved it because of its colours and how smooth it was; it gave me the right feeling whenever I was free from my schoolwork.

Errors: tense inconsistency — the student is describing a past possession and should use past tense verbs (loved, was, gave, was free). 'it's smooth' should be 'it was smooth'. 'gives the right I' is ungrammatical; likely 'gave me the right feeling'. 'school work' should be one word 'schoolwork'. Suggestions: keep past tense throughout when talking about past events and use clear noun phrases like 'the right feeling'.

× I used to.

✓ I used to ride it a lot.

Error: incomplete sentence 'I used to.' requires a verb phrase to be complete. 'Used to' must be followed by base verb to indicate past habitual action. Suggestion: complete the thought, e.g., 'I used to ride it a lot.'

× This bikes are very common in my country because it is more convenient than the cars.

✓ These bikes are very common in my country because they are more convenient than cars.

Errors: demonstrative 'This' should match plural 'These' for 'bikes' (singular/plural issue). 'it is' should agree with plural subject 'they are'. 'the cars' is unnecessary generalization; use 'cars'. Suggestions: ensure demonstratives and verbs agree in number and omit unnecessary definite articles when speaking generally.

× There is a very clean routes ride on and the more most of the people prefer riding on bike and then the other vehicles because no no fuel consumption and no gas pollution.

✓ There are very clean routes to ride on, and most people prefer riding bikes rather than other vehicles because they use less fuel and cause less air pollution.

Errors: 'There is a very clean routes' mismatches number and uses awkward structure — use 'There are very clean routes to ride on' (there be issue and number agreement). 'the more most of the people' is redundant and incorrect; 'most people' is correct. 'riding on bike' should be 'riding bikes' or 'riding a bike'. 'and then the other vehicles' should be 'than other vehicles' (incorrect conjunction/comparison). 'no no fuel consumption and no gas pollution' is incorrect and unclear; specify 'they use less fuel and cause less air pollution'. Suggestions: fix subject-verb number, use 'most people', use 'rather than' or 'than' for comparisons, and phrase negatives positively with comparative 'less'.

× Also also the bikes are more uh easy to control.

✓ Also, bikes are easier to control.

Errors: wordiness and awkward comparative 'more easy' should be 'easier' (comparative form). Repetition 'Also also' is redundant. Suggestions: use 'easier' for correct comparative and avoid repeated fillers.