Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations (umm) and unclear statements (e.g., “my mother borrowed from me”). Also keep your response within about 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small red bike for my tenth birthday, and I rode it every day after school with my friends. We often rode to the park and practiced tricks, which helped me become quite confident on a bike.

제안: Answer directly and give specific comparisons. Use linking words (however, whereas, for example) to contrast uses in your country with Australia. Replace vague phrases ("like", "or whatever") with precise reasons or examples. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use appropriate vocabulary (commute, recreation, infrastructure).

예시: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country for leisure activities. For example, many people cycle in parks and along rivers at weekends; however, unlike in Australia, cycling is less common for commuting because there are fewer dedicated bike lanes and public bike programs.

× Yes, umm, I used to have a bike, umm, my mother, I remember my mother borrowed from me umm, in my birthday and I used to use it a lot every day after school with some friends and that's it.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike. I remember my mother gave it to me for my birthday, and I used to ride it a lot every day after school with some friends.

The original sentence has past-tense meaning but contains incorrect past-tense verb choice and confusing phrasing. 'Borrowed from me' is wrong because the mother did not borrow the bike from the child; she gave the bike to the child, so the correct past-tense verb is 'gave'. Also the long run-on sentence should be split for clarity and natural past habitual action is correctly expressed as 'used to'. Suggestion: replace 'borrowed from me' with 'gave it to me for', split into shorter sentences, and keep consistent past tense 'used to have' and 'used to ride'. Next steps: practice using 'gave' vs 'borrowed' and punctuate to separate ideas.

× Yes I do. Usually people in my country use bikes more to like in the parks.

✓ Yes, I do. Usually people in my country use bikes more in parks.

The phrase 'use bikes more to like in the parks' misuses the preposition and contains filler words. The correct preposition is 'in' for locations like parks. Also remove unnecessary fillers 'to like'. Suggestion: say 'use bikes more in parks' for concise, correct expression of location. Next steps: focus on choosing simple prepositions for locations (in/at/on).

× No, like here. That in Australia is really useful, like to go to work or to neighborhoods or whatever.

✓ No, like here in Australia, they are really useful for going to work, getting around neighborhoods, or similar purposes.

The original sentences are fragmented and ungrammatical. 'That in Australia is really useful' lacks a clear subject and correct word order. Also 'to neighborhoods' is awkward; use 'getting around neighborhoods' or 'going to one's neighborhood'. The corrected version supplies a clear subject ('they' referring to bikes), correct preposition placement ('in Australia'), and uses the gerund 'for going' to express purpose. Suggestion: use complete sentences with an explicit subject and natural phrases like 'useful for going to work' or 'getting around neighborhoods'. Next steps: practice forming complete sentences and using gerunds after 'useful for'.