Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구조와 어휘 선택을 명확하게 하고, 반복과 혼동되는 표현을 피하세요. 주제 문장으로 바로 답하고, 그 다음에 하나 또는 두 개의 구체적인 이유나 예를 덧붙이세요. 예를 들어 ‘I had a bike’로 시작한 뒤, ‘I used training wheels because I couldn’t balance’처럼 구체적 사실을 연결사(for example, because, so)로 간결히 설명하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한 불필요한 재수정(‘I meant... Rather...’)을 줄이고 문장을 매끄럽게 연결하세요.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a bike with training wheels because I couldn’t balance on two wheels when I was young, so my parents attached them until I felt more confident. For example, I only learned to ride without training wheels when I was about eight.

제안: 의견을 먼저 분명히 말한 뒤, 이유를 두세 문장으로 구체화하세요. 연결어(for, because, moreover, for example)를 사용해 논리를 명확히 하고, 표현을 반복하지 마세요(예: 'avoid or to reduce pollution' -> 'reduce pollution'). 구체적인 예시(도시, 통근자, 자전거 도로 등)를 추가하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

예시: I think bikes are widely used rather than being a fashion trend. Many people use them for commuting to reduce pollution and stay fit, especially in cities with good bike lanes. For example, commuters often cycle to work during rush hour to avoid traffic and save money.

× Though I when I was a child I was not able to ride a bike which has four wheels.

✓ When I was a child, I was not able to ride a bike with two wheels.

The original sentence has word order and reference errors: 'Though I when I was a child' is ungrammatical and 'a bike which has four wheels' conflicts with intended meaning. Rephrase to 'When I was a child, I was not able to ride a bike with two wheels.' for correct order and clear meaning. Suggestion: place the time clause first and use 'with two wheels' to describe the bicycle. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Uh, I meant two wheels.

✓ Uh, I meant a bike with two wheels.

The pronoun 'two wheels' lacks a clear noun; it's better to specify 'a bike with two wheels' to clarify the object. Suggestion: include the noun the adjective or numeral modifies to avoid ambiguity. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Rather, I could only ride a bike with four wheels 'cause I couldn't really balance properly.

✓ Actually, I could only ride a bike with four wheels because I couldn't balance properly.

Colloquial filler 'Rather' is awkward here and 'cause' should be written as 'because' in formal correction. Also 'really' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'Actually' or remove filler and use 'because' for a clearer sentence. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I was just too afraid for that.

✓ I was just too afraid of that.

The correct preposition after 'afraid' to indicate the cause is 'of', not 'for'. Suggestion: use 'afraid of' + noun/clause to express fear. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I'd say bikes are more common than popular in my country because people usually ride it to avoid or to reduce pollution and to keep them very healthy.

✓ I'd say bikes are more common than popular in my country because people usually ride them to reduce pollution and stay healthy.

Pronoun and agreement errors: 'people usually ride it' is wrong because 'it' does not agree with plural 'bikes'; use 'them'. 'to avoid or to reduce pollution' is redundant; 'reduce pollution' suffices. 'to keep them very healthy' incorrectly uses 'them' to refer to people and is awkward; use 'stay healthy'. Suggestion: use plural pronouns matching 'bikes' and simplify infinitive phrases. Grammar problem type ID: 27