Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar, and use a clear structure: start with a topic sentence, add one or two specific supporting details, and finish. Correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, “and”, “so”, “because”) appropriately. Also check vocabulary (e.g., use “ride” not “write”).

예시: Yes, I did. It was a pink bike my father gave me when I was six, and I rode it to school every day. It had ribbons on both handlebars, so I remember feeling very proud and happy whenever I rode it.

제안: Answer directly, organize ideas, correct grammar and reduce hesitation. Use a topic sentence, then give two specific supporting reasons with linking words (e.g., “because”, “for example”, “especially”). Avoid repetition and use accurate phrases (e.g., “people of all ages”, “plays an important role”).

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in Vietnam. They are convenient and affordable, so many people use them for daily commuting. For example, you can see people of all ages riding bikes on the streets, especially in smaller cities and rural areas.

× 'Uh, I used to write it every day to school is had ribbons on the two side of the handles and I was so in love with it when I was a child.'

✓ 'Uh, I used to ride it to school every day. It had ribbons on both sides of the handlebars, and I was so in love with it when I was a child.'

'write' is the wrong verb; the correct verb for travelling by bicycle is 'ride'. The original sentence also mixes tenses and has incorrect clauses. Split into two sentences and use the past simple 'had' for the ribbons. Use 'both sides' and 'handlebars' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use a single simple past structure for actions that happened regularly in the past.'

× 'It was a very lovely pink bike and it was a gift and it was a gift from my dad when I was 6.'

✓ 'It was a very lovely pink bike; it was a gift from my dad when I was six.'

'when I was 6' should be written as 'when I was six' in formal writing; more importantly the sentence is repetitive ('it was a gift' repeated). Use a semicolon or conjunction to combine clauses and write out small numbers in words for clarity. The preposition 'from' is correct but repetition and style make it awkward.'

× 'Yes, I do due due to its convenient, I believe.'

✓ 'Yes, I do, due to its convenience, I believe.'

'convenient' is an adjective while the sentence requires the noun 'convenience'. Remove the duplicate 'due' and add commas for clarity. Ensure present simple 'do' matches the following clause.'

× 'I believe people from all range of age, you did a lot in their everyday life here in Vietnam.'

✓ 'I believe people of all age ranges use them a lot in their everyday life here in Vietnam.'

'from all range of age' is ungrammatical; use 'people of all age ranges' or 'people of all ages'. 'you did a lot' is incorrect in context; it should be 'use them a lot' referring to bikes. Ensure subject matches: 'people' requires plural verb form 'use'.'

× 'I can especially see it like a lot on the road here and umm, it's play a very important role.'

✓ 'I can especially see them a lot on the roads here, and they play a very important role.'

'it' is the wrong pronoun for plural 'bikes' — use 'them' or 'they'. 'like' is unnecessary and informal here. 'it's play' combines contraction 'it's' (it is) with the plural verb 'play' causing a subject-verb mismatch; use 'they play'. Also use plural 'roads' for general observation.'

× 'It plays a very important role in people's life here.'

✓ 'It plays a very important role in people's lives here.'

'people's life' should be plural 'people's lives' because 'people' is plural and each person has a life. Ensure noun agreement between possessive plural and the noun.'}]}