Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar, start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid awkward phrasing (e.g. "the game is that little bit more freedom") and check articles and prepositions. Use linking words like "for example" or "so" to connect ideas and keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike as a child. For example, I rode it every summer with friends to the local park and shops. It gave me a lot of freedom and was a fun way to spend the long school holidays.

제안: Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then support it with one or two clear, specific reasons. Avoid repetition ("due to" used twice) and fix unclear phrases ("getting to 1 end"). Use linking words like "because" or "therefore" and include a short example or statistic if possible.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Glasgow because they help commuters avoid heavy traffic in the city centre. For example, many people cycle to work instead of sitting in slow buses, which makes travel faster and cheaper.

× I used to ride that a lot in the summer with my friends, cycle around the park going to the shops and football matches because the game is that little bit more freedom and it was a fun way to spend over holidays.

✓ I used to ride it a lot in the summer with my friends, cycle around the park, and go to the shops and football matches because the games gave us a little bit more freedom, and it was a fun way to spend the holidays.

The sentence contains multiple tense and word-choice problems. 'Ride that' should be 'ride it' (pronoun reference). The original mixes gerunds and base forms inconsistently; maintain parallel structure: 'ride, cycle, and go'. 'The game is that little bit more freedom' is ungrammatical and incorrect tense; intended meaning is past so use past tense 'gave us a little bit more freedom'. 'Spend over holidays' is incorrect collocation; correct is 'spend the holidays'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use parallel verbs and correct pronouns and collocations.

× Bikes are very popular in Glasgow due to the ease they bring for commuters to travel around the city centre, especially going to work due to the heavy traffic flows with buses, taxis all within the centre.

✓ Bikes are very popular in Glasgow because they make it easier for commuters to travel around the city centre, especially for getting to work when traffic is heavy with buses and taxis concentrated in the centre.

Problems include incorrect preposition and awkward phrasing. 'Due to the ease they bring for commuters to travel' is wordy and awkward; use 'because they make it easier for commuters to travel'. 'Especially going to work due to the heavy traffic flows' should be 'especially for getting to work when traffic is heavy'. Also list items need prepositions and articles: 'buses, taxis all within the centre' becomes 'buses and taxis concentrated in the centre'. Suggestion: simplify the clause, use 'because' for reason and 'when' for condition, and ensure correct prepositions.

× So having a bike makes it an easier mode of transport for those getting to 1 end of the city to the other.

✓ So having a bike makes it an easier mode of transport for those getting from one end of the city to the other.

Error: incorrect use of numeral '1' and missing preposition 'from'. Use 'one end' (singular) and the idiomatic prepositional phrase 'from one end of the city to the other'. Suggestion: write numbers as words in formal speech and include the preposition 'from' to show movement between two points.