Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve accuracy, fluency and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, reduce repetition, use correct vocabulary (e.g. 'Viper' may be brand; 'child' -> 'as a child'), and correct grammar (past tense: 'had', 'rode', 'taught'). Add one or two concise supporting details using linking words (e.g. 'because', 'so'). Keep to maximum 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a Viper bicycle when I was a child. I often rode it with my brother, who taught me how to balance and pedal. Because I practiced every day, I became quite confident riding around our neighborhood.

제안: Make your opinion clear and support it with specific reasons and examples in coherent sentences. Use linking words (e.g. 'because', 'although', 'however') and correct grammar (singular/plural, verb forms). Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing. Keep answer to 2–4 sentences.

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people prefer motorcycles and cars for daily travel. For example, in my family we own a car and a motorcycle, so we rarely use a bike for commuting.

× Yes, I have a Viper child.

✓ Yes, I had a Viper when I was a child.

The student used the adjective 'child' after the noun 'Viper' incorrectly. The intended meaning is possession in the past, so use the past tense 'had' and place 'when I was a child' as a time clause. Also remove the incorrect modifier 'child' after the bike name. Suggestion: use 'I had a Viper when I was a child.'

× I like, I like, I like to arrive.

✓ I liked riding it a lot.

Repetition and the verb 'to arrive' are incorrect for describing past enjoyment. The question asks about childhood, so use past tense 'liked'. Use a gerund 'riding' to express enjoyment of the activity. Suggestion: say 'I liked riding it a lot.'

× Oh, whenever I was a shy, I ride a bike with my brother and my brother teach me.

✓ Oh, when I was shy, I rode a bike with my brother and he taught me.

Several issues: 'whenever I was a shy' incorrectly uses the article and word choice; use 'when I was shy' instead. Tense must be past for actions in childhood: 'rode' and 'taught'. Pronoun repetition 'my brother teach me' should be 'he taught me'. Suggestion: use 'When I was shy, I rode a bike with my brother and he taught me.'

× I don't think so because I saw many people ride a motorcycle more than ride bike and and in my family have personal car and motorcycle that have.

✓ I don't think so because I see many people riding motorcycles more than riding bikes, and my family has a car and a motorcycle.

Mixed past 'saw' with present 'don't think' — keep present tense 'see' to match the opinion. Use gerund 'riding' after 'see' and plural 'motorcycles' and 'bikes'. Remove duplicated 'and and'. Use correct subject-verb agreement: 'my family has'. Also use articles: 'a car' and 'a motorcycle'. Suggestion: 'I don't think so because I see many people riding motorcycles more than riding bikes, and my family has a car and a motorcycle.'