Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Begin with a clear, direct topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and grammatical errors (e.g., use past tense consistently: 'I didn't have'). Use simple, correct vocabulary rather than unclear words like 'try' or 'trade.' For example, explain briefly why your family couldn't afford a bike and mention an alternative you used (walking, public transport, borrowing).

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Because my family had little money, we couldn’t afford one, so I usually walked to school or took the bus instead.

제안: Start with a concise opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and use linking words (for example, 'because,' 'so,' 'therefore'). Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement: 'bikes are') and word choice ('cheap' or 'convenient' instead of 'effective'; 'commute' instead of 'come work') will make your answer clearer. Give one or two concrete examples about who uses bikes and for what purposes. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. Many people use bicycles to commute to work or school, and students often ride them to campus. Therefore, you see bikes everywhere, especially in busy cities.

× No, because my family is so poor so I don't have a try in my I don't have buy in my trade.

✓ No, because my family was so poor I couldn't try to buy one.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure and verb-tense problems. 'My family is so poor so' is redundant and should use past tense 'was' to match 'when you were a child.' 'I don't have a try in my I don't have buy in my trade' is ungrammatical; the intended meaning is likely that the student could not afford a bike, so use 'I couldn't try to buy one' or better 'we couldn't afford one.' Suggestion: simplify and use past tense: 'No, because my family was so poor we couldn't afford a bike.'

× Yes, the bikes in my country is very popular because it is so far and effective.

✓ Yes, bikes in my country are very popular because they are useful for long distances and efficient.

'The bikes' with plural subject requires plural verb 'are' not 'is.' Also 'it' must match plural 'bikes' so use 'they.' 'So far and effective' is incorrect phrasing; likely meaning is 'useful for long distances and efficient.' Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number and use plural pronouns for plural nouns.

× Everyone want to bye bye to the come work and study and to play.

✓ Everyone wants to ride bikes to commute to work and study and to play.

'Everyone' is a singular indefinite pronoun and requires the third person singular verb 'wants,' not 'want.' 'Bye bye to the come' is incorrect word choice; intended meaning is 'ride bikes to commute.' Use 'ride bikes to commute to work and school and for recreation.' Also 'study' should be 'school' or 'to study.' Suggestion: match verb form to 'everyone' and choose correct verbs and vocabulary (ride, commute).