Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and natural, but can be more concise and better structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, umm) and slightly repetitive phrases ("never actually got me a bike" and "never had a bike").

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. My parents thought it was too dangerous for me to ride on the road when I was small, so they didn’t teach me or buy one. As a result, I often felt jealous watching other children cycle around the neighborhood.

제안: Good content and clear opinion. Improve cohesion by combining short sentences and using linking words to make it smoother. Reduce fillers and be more specific about why e-bikes are popular (convenience, cost, short trips).

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in China, especially electric bikes. They’re convenient and affordable for short trips, so you see them parked outside supermarkets and malls. Many e-bikes use QR-code rental systems, which makes it easy for people to pick one up and ride across the city.

× Unfortunately, I never had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Unfortunately, I never had a bike when I was a child.

No change needed; sentence correctly uses past tense to describe a past situation. Keep past simple for completed past states.

× Uh, my parents thought it was too dangerous to be on the road by myself as a small child, so they never actually got me a bike or taught me to ride a bike.

✓ Uh, my parents thought it was too dangerous for me to be on the road by myself as a small child, so they never actually bought me a bike or taught me how to ride one.

Use 'for me to' after 'dangerous' to correctly link the feeling to the person (prepositional structure). 'Got me a bike' is informal and acceptable, but 'bought me a bike' is clearer. Use 'taught me how to ride one' to avoid repeating 'bike' and to use the correct infinitive structure after 'taught'. Suggestions: use 'for someone to' with adjectives like 'dangerous', use 'bought' for clarity, and use 'taught me how to' + base verb.

× Umm, I was pretty jealous of the children when I was little, seeing all the other kids cycling around.

✓ Umm, I was pretty jealous of the other children when I was little, seeing them cycling around.

Sentence mainly correct in past tense. Improvement: replace vague 'the children' with 'the other children' to clarify reference and avoid repetition by using 'them' instead of 'all the other kids'. No tense change needed. Suggest simplifying to avoid redundancy.

× Absolutely. Bicycles are extremely popular in China nowadays.

✓ Absolutely. Bicycles are extremely popular in China nowadays.

This sentence is grammatically correct: present simple correctly describes a general present fact. No change required.

× Umm, people don't just own their own bikes.

✓ Umm, people don't just own bikes.

Redundant use of 'their own' is unnecessary; 'own bikes' is concise and correct. Pronoun 'their' isn't incorrect but redundancy can be avoided. Suggest removing 'their own' for naturalness.

× And there are, uh, E bikes everywhere.

✓ And there are, uh, e-bikes everywhere.

Hyphenate 'e-bikes' as the standard form for electric bicycles; capitalization 'E' is acceptable but 'e-bikes' is more consistent. No tense issue; adjust formatting for correctness and naturalness.

× Basically, they're on the streets and they're in front of the supermarkets, in front of malls, and people can just get the QR code and go around everywhere.

✓ Basically, they're on the streets and in front of supermarkets and malls, and people can just scan a QR code and go everywhere.

Remove the repeated 'they're' for conciseness and parallel structure. Use 'in front of supermarkets and malls' for smoother phrasing. 'Get the QR code' is imprecise; 'scan a QR code' is the common collocation when using app-based bike services. 'Go around everywhere' is wordy; 'go everywhere' is clearer. Suggest using parallel structures and common collocations like 'scan a QR code'.