Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler phrases like “actually” and ending with “and that’s it.” Also keep within 3–4 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., prefer, hobby, pastime).

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. Instead, I spent most of my free time playing football with my friends, so cycling was never something I took up. Because I preferred team sports, I didn't learn to ride until I was older.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear opinion sentence followed by specific reasons and a short example. Use linking words (for example, because, however) and correct grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement, remove repeated words). Try to use more precise vocabulary such as commuters, motorcycles, car ownership.

예시: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars or motorcycles for commuting. For example, many urban workers value speed and comfort, so they choose motorcycles or cars instead of cycling. However, bicycles are more common in rural areas where short trips are typical.

× No, actually, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I spent most of my time playing football with my friend.

✓ No, actually, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I spent most of my time playing football with my friends.

The original sentence uses singular 'my friend' while 'most of my time' implies multiple occasions with potentially more than one friend; this is a quantifier/number agreement issue best fixed by plural 'friends'. This fits as a past tense context but the core error is singular/plural mismatch; changing to 'friends' makes the sentence more natural and grammatically consistent. Suggestion: use plural when referring to repeated activities with peers.'

× So I think cycling, actually, it's not my favorite hobby.

✓ So I think cycling is not my favorite hobby.

The sentence has an unnecessary insertion 'actually, it's' causing tense/person redundancy. The correct form uses present simple 'is' to state a general preference. Remove the extra clause for clarity. Suggestion: keep the present simple structure for general statements: 'I think cycling is not my favorite hobby.'

× And that's it.

✓ That's all.

'And that's it' is conversational but slightly awkward in this context; 'That's all' is a clearer, concise closing. This is a sentence structure/style improvement to match typical spoken responses. Suggestion: use concise closings like 'That's all.'

× I don't think so, because in my country people used to work on their feet, ride their cars, ride their motorcycles.

✓ I don't think so, because in my country people usually walk, drive cars, or ride motorcycles.

The phrase 'used to work on their feet' is incorrect and unclear; 'people usually walk' or 'work on foot' would be better. Also parallelism in listing activities improves grammar: 'walk, drive cars, or ride motorcycles.' Use present simple 'usually' to describe general habits. Suggestion: maintain parallel verb forms and correct collocations ('walk' not 'work on their feet').

× But bikes few people like like to ride them.

✓ But few people like to ride bikes.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and a duplicated 'like'. Correct structure is 'few people like to ride bikes' or 'but few people ride bikes.' This is a sentence structure and word order error; remove duplication and place 'few people' before the verb. Suggestion: use 'few people' + verb + object for negative-limited statements.'