Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, verb tenses and fluency. Start with a direct topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect word choices (e.g. say "bicycle" or "bike", not both in a mixed way).

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, my father bought me a cycle to learn how to ride safely, so I didn’t get the bicycle I wanted. As a result, I only learned basic riding skills at home rather than riding longer distances.

제안: Use clearer vocabulary and organize ideas with linking words. Begin with a concise opinion, then provide specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words and repetition; use correct collocations (e.g. "bikes are common" or "bicycles are popular").

예시: Yes, bicycles are very common in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. However, I prefer cars because they feel safer and more comfortable, especially for family journeys or in bad weather.

× No, I don't have any bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'Don't have' is present tense; use 'didn't have'. Also use 'a bike' instead of 'any bike' for singular count noun in negative past context.

× When I am a child I dream to ride a bike, but my father want to give me a cycle for my driving, not a bike.

✓ When I was a child I dreamed of riding a bike, but my father wanted to give me a bicycle for getting around, not a bike.

Multiple issues: The time reference is past, so use 'was' not 'am'. 'Dream' should be past 'dreamed' to match past narrative. The verb 'dream' is followed by 'of' plus gerund ('riding'). 'Want' should be past 'wanted'. Use 'bicycle' or 'bike' consistently; 'for my driving' is unnatural — 'for getting around' or 'to get around' is better. Also 'dreamed' vs 'dream' and gerund form correct verb patterns.

× Yes, umm, bikes already populated in our country, but I love, I love cars to drive because it's very safe, safe full drive.

✓ Yes, umm, bikes are already common in our country, but I love driving cars because they are much safer.

'Bikes already populated' is incorrect phrasing; use 'are already common' (present tense 'are' describes current state). 'I love, I love cars to drive' should be 'I love driving cars' or 'I love cars'. 'It's very safe, safe full drive' is ungrammatical; use plural 'they are' to refer to cars and 'much safer' to compare safety. Also choose natural collocations: 'common' instead of 'populated' when referring to objects.

× And my family also said that bike is not safe for us.

✓ And my family also said that bikes are not safe for us.

When speaking generally about bikes, use plural 'bikes' and plural verb 'are'. The original uses singular 'bike is' which is unnatural for a general statement. Use articles appropriately: 'the bike' would refer to a specific bike; here general plural is correct.