Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, verb tense consistency and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, add one supporting detail with a linking word, and keep it concise (no more than 3–4 short sentences). Replace awkward phrases (e.g., “have rolled that by”) with natural verbs like “rode” or “practiced.”

예시: Yes, I did. My mother bought me a bicycle when I was seven, and I rode it almost every day. Because I practiced regularly, I became confident riding on busy streets quickly.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and follow with a clear reason and a specific example. Use formal contractions appropriately and correct vocabulary (e.g., “popular,” “children,” “ride”). Use linking words like “because” or “for example.” Keep it coherent and avoid fragments.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many children use them for short trips and exercise. For example, lots of families let their kids ride to school or to nearby parks on weekends.

× Yes I did. I have rolled that by every day.

✓ Yes, I did. I rode it every day.

The student uses present perfect ('have rolled') incorrectly for a past habitual action tied to a finished time ('when you were a child'). Use simple past ('rode') for completed past habits; also 'ride a bike' uses 'ride' not 'roll' for cycling. Suggest: use simple past for past routines and correct verb choice.

× My mom has bought it for me and I was practice riding bike every day.

✓ My mom bought it for me, and I practiced riding the bike every day.

Two issues: tense and article. 'Has bought' (present perfect) is less appropriate for a past completed event tied to childhood; use simple past 'bought'. 'I was practice' is ungrammatical; correct is 'I practiced' (simple past). Also English requires an article before 'bike' in this context: 'the bike' or 'a bike'. Suggest: use consistent simple past for past events and include appropriate articles.

× Yeah, but it's kinda popular in my country due to most of children in my country.

✓ Yeah, but it's not very popular in my country because most children in my country do not have bikes.

Original has several problems: 'it's kinda popular' conflicts with 'due to most of children' (meaning unclear). 'Due to' is used incorrectly; 'because' is better for reason clauses. 'Most of children' is ungrammatical; use 'most children' or 'most of the children'. Also the sentence needs a clear verb phrase for the reason (e.g. 'do not have bikes'). Suggest: use 'because' for reasons, correct noun phrase 'most children', and ensure verb expresses the idea.

× Was lovely to write a bike.

✓ It was lovely to ride a bike.

Sentence lacks subject and uses wrong verb 'write' instead of 'ride'. Also missing pronoun 'It' as subject. Correct structure: 'It was lovely to ride a bike.' Suggest: include subject, choose correct verb 'ride', and keep infinitive 'to ride' after 'lovely to'.