Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is correct but too short and lacks development. Give a brief topic sentence then add one or two supporting details (where you rode it, who you rode with, or a memory). Use one linking word if you add another sentence. Keep it natural and under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bicycle that I often rode around my neighborhood with my friends after school. For example, we would race to the park every afternoon, which helped me become more confident and independent.

제안: Your answer has a clear idea but contains grammatical errors, awkward phrasing, and some unclear vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific reasons and use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Avoid incorrect words like "recall" and capitalize properly. Keep answers concise (1–3 sentences).

예시: Yes, I think bikes are still popular in my country because many primary and secondary school students use them to get to school. For example, in rural areas families often cannot afford cars or motorbikes, so children ride bicycles daily to travel short distances.

× It's still popular for Young's people who study at primary school or secondary school, especially who live in the province that they could not afford the expensive recall such as like motorbike or car.

✓ It's still popular among young people who study in primary or secondary school, especially those who live in the provinces and cannot afford expensive items such as motorbikes or cars.

Errors: 'Young's people' is incorrect adjective form and possessive; correct is 'young people'. Use 'among' to indicate popularity within a group. Use 'study in' not 'study at' for levels of school. 'Especially who' should be 'especially those who' to refer to people. 'Province' should be plural 'provinces' if talking generally. 'Could not afford' mismatches present tense context; use 'cannot afford'. 'Expensive recall such as like' is ungrammatical — use 'expensive items such as motorbikes or cars'. Suggestions: replace 'Young's people' with 'young people', use 'among', use 'study in', use 'those who', use plural nouns when generalizing, and match verb tense to the present context.