Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Grammar and clarity need improvement. Start with a clear topic sentence and correct tense: say whether you had a bike or not. If you didn't, briefly explain why or describe an alternative (e.g., walking, public transport, or borrowing). Use one or two supporting sentences linked logically and keep it under five sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I usually walked to school because our house was close by, and my parents preferred me to be with other children. Occasionally I borrowed a neighbour's bike for short rides, which I really enjoyed.

제안: Improve sentence structure, specificity and linking. Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and examples using linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'because', 'therefore'). Clarify the point about affordability and fuel efficiency with a short comparison or result. Keep answers concise and natural.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and fuel-efficient. For example, models like the Bullet and KTM are common among commuters and young riders. As a result, many people choose bikes for city travel to avoid traffic and save on fuel costs.

× I didn't have had a bike since were a child.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The student used an incorrect combination of auxiliaries and verb forms: 'didn't have had' mixes past simple negative with past perfect incorrectly. Also 'since were a child' is wrong: 'since' with a point in time requires present perfect, and 'were' should be 'was' with the singular subject 'I'. The appropriate simple past negative for possession is 'I didn't have a bike' and the time clause should be 'when I was a child.' Suggestion: use 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.' or if keeping 'since' use present perfect: 'I haven't had a bike since I was a child.'

× There are many popular bikes in my country, example for Bullet, KTM etc.

✓ There are many popular bike brands in my country, for example Bullet and KTM.

The phrase 'example for' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'for example.' Also 'Bullet, KTM etc.' should be integrated with 'for example' and use 'and' before the last item for clarity. 'Bikes' is acceptable but 'bike brands' is clearer when naming manufacturers. Suggestion: use 'for example' and list examples with 'and' rather than 'etc.' at the end.

× All over bikes are affordable fuel efficiency for city travel like models.

✓ Overall, bikes are affordable and fuel-efficient for city travel.

This sentence has multiple structure and word choice errors. 'All over' is incorrect here; 'Overall' conveys the intended meaning. 'Affordable fuel efficiency' mixes adjective and noun awkwardly; we need 'affordable and fuel-efficient.' The phrase 'for city travel like models' is unclear and unnecessary after the correction. Suggestion: use concise structure 'Overall, bikes are affordable and fuel-efficient for city travel.'