Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give a specific detail or short example. Use past tense consistently and avoid unrelated words (e.g., “bag”). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if adding extra information.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bike when I was eight, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend with my friends. Because I practiced a lot, I became quite confident riding on busy paths.

제안: Answer directly with a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Use correct grammar (e.g., “almost everyone” not “almost every people”) and provide 1–2 supporting points linked with words such as “because” or “for example.” Avoid stray numbers or unclear phrases.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or school, and cities often have bike lanes that make cycling safer.

× Yes, I have a bag when I was a child my parents bought it for me when I was 8 and I used to ride to the park every weekend with my friends.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was eight, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend with my friends.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time expressions 'when I was a child' and 'my parents bought it'. Use past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Also the word 'bag' is likely a wrong noun; context requires 'bike'. The long run-on sentence should be split into two or more sentences and include the object 'it' after 'ride'. Spell out numbers under ten as 'eight'. Suggestions: use consistent past tense for past events, choose the correct noun (bike), add punctuation to separate clauses, and include the object after 'ride'.

× Yes, I think so, because almost every people like this.

✓ Yes, I think so, because almost everyone likes them.

'Almost every people' is ungrammatical: 'every' requires a singular noun (every person) or use 'everyone'. 'People' is plural and cannot follow 'every'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'everyone' is singular and takes 'likes'. The demonstrative 'this' is vague; use 'them' or rephrase to 'bikes are popular' if referring to bikes. Suggestions: use 'everyone' for general people, ensure singular verbs with 'everyone', and use appropriate pronoun reference.

× 5 0. What took the bike to popular?

✓ What made bikes popular?

The original fragment '5 0.' appears to be extraneous noise and 'What took the bike to popular?' is an ungrammatical sentence. The intended question asks for causes of popularity. Use 'What made bikes popular?' or 'What made the bike popular?' depending on whether singular or plural is meant. 'Made' is the correct verb for asking about causes. Suggestions: remove irrelevant characters, use 'made' for cause, and choose singular/plural noun to match meaning.