Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct, start with a clear topic sentence, add one or two specific supporting details using linking words, and correct tense/grammar errors. Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). For example, mention who you rode with, where you rode, and a brief memory to make it vivid. Avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my friends around our neighborhood, and we spent hours racing and playing games. It felt liberating to explore the streets on my own, especially on sunny afternoons. Those rides are one of my happiest childhood memories.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because / also / for instance). Correct grammar (e.g., 'middle class people', 'cannot afford') and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Be concise and coherent.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because many middle-class people cannot afford private cars, so they use bikes as an economical alternative. Also, students often cycle to school since it is cheap and convenient, especially in crowded cities.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child and I often rode it with my friends around our neighbors.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I often rode it with my friends around our neighborhood.

Missing article before 'child' (should be 'a child') and incorrect noun 'neighbors' used where 'neighborhood' fits the meaning. This is a sentence structure and article usage issue; add the article and use the correct noun to make the location clear.

× I enjoy it a lot because it feel liberating to explore the street and we would spend our racing and playing games on our bikes.

✓ I enjoyed it a lot because it felt liberating to explore the streets, and we would race and play games on our bikes.

Tense inconsistency and subject-verb agreement: context is past tense, so 'enjoy' should be 'enjoyed' and 'feel' should be 'felt'. 'Explore the street' should be plural 'streets' for general meaning. 'Spend our racing and playing games' is incorrect structure; use verbs 'race and play' to express the activities.

× I think the most popular transport is bike in our country because there are so many people in middle, middle class, which one they didn't afford their own private car.

✓ I think the most popular form of transport in our country is the bicycle because there are many people in the middle class who cannot afford their own private car.

Problems include word order and article use: 'transport is bike' should be 'form of transport is the bicycle'. 'In middle, middle class' is ungrammatical; use 'in the middle class'. Use a relative clause 'who cannot afford' instead of 'which one they didn't afford' and correct tense/modal 'cannot afford' for general present meaning.

× Uh, that's why they use bicycle.

✓ That's why they use bicycles.

Article and number: 'use bicycle' is incorrect; use the plural 'bicycles' or 'a bicycle' with appropriate article. Plural fits the meaning of people using bicycles in general.

× Otherwise, uh, most of the student.

✓ Otherwise, most of the students do too.

Fragment lacking a verb and incorrect number: 'most of the student' should be 'most of the students' and the sentence needs a verb to complete the thought. Adding 'do too' clarifies that most students also use bicycles.