Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can make it more natural and slightly more informative. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid contractions like 'cause' in formal speech and reduce redundancy ("when I was a child" and "I had a bike" are repetitive).

예시: Yes, I did. My bicycle was a second-hand one given by my mother's friend, because her daughter had outgrown it. It was a small red bike with training wheels, and I used it to ride around the neighborhood every afternoon.

제안: This answer is unclear and off-topic. The examiner asked about the popularity of bikes, but you discussed your childhood locations. Begin with a clear opinion about bike popularity, then support it with one or two specific reasons and a linking word. Keep responses concise and grammatical; avoid fragmented sentences.

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in Hong Kong. For example, many people prefer public transport and the city is crowded, so cycling is less common; however, cycling is more popular in parks and among weekend enthusiasts.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

No correction necessary. The sentence correctly uses the past tense 'had' to describe possession in childhood, which matches the question about past possession.

× It was given by my mom's friend 'cause her daughter has grown up and no longer uses it.

✓ It was given to me by my mom's friend because her daughter had grown up and no longer used it.

Two issues: (1) Use of the passive is fine, but the verb should be 'given to me' to show the recipient clearly. (2) Tense consistency: the giving and the daughter's growing up are events in the past, so use past perfect or simple past. 'Her daughter had grown up' or 'her daughter grew up' are both acceptable; here 'had grown up' emphasizes that the growing up happened before the bike was given. Also change 'no longer uses it' to 'no longer used it' to keep past reference. Replace informal ''cause' with 'because' for formal grammar.

× Hmm, not really 'cause I was. I grew up until age of 6 in England, China.

✓ Hmm, not really, because I grew up in England and China until the age of six.

Original contains an incomplete clause 'because I was.' Remove the fragment and combine ideas into one complete sentence. Use 'grew up in England and China' for clearer location listing and 'until the age of six' for natural phrasing. Also replace informal ''cause' with 'because'.

× But after that, I came to Hong Kong to study primary school.

✓ But after that, I came to Hong Kong to attend primary school.

English uses 'attend primary school' rather than 'study primary school.' Also omit the article before 'primary school' in this context or use 'attend primary school' without 'to.' The corrected sentence keeps past tense 'came' and uses the correct verb and preposition.