Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. yes/no and basic fact), then add one or two specific supporting details (age, why it was memorable, ability). Avoid repetition and hesitations. Use linking words for coherence (for example, "when", "because", "so").

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a teenager. I got my first bike when I was about 16, and it was quite large compared with others. At first I couldn't ride it well because I was new to cycling, but I practiced for a few weeks and became confident.

제안: Give a direct answer, then add specific reasons and examples. Use clearer linking phrases and more precise vocabulary (e.g. "affordable", "commuting"). Avoid repeating "in our country" and refine grammar ("for daily basis" → "for daily transport").

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. They are more affordable than cars and public transport in many areas, so many people use them for daily commuting to work or school. For example, in my city lots of students cycle to university because it is cheap and convenient.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was a not a small, it was a big cause that time I was like, hmm, maybe 16 years old or when I got my first bike and I, I, I can't even ride at that time 'cause I'm new to that.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was not small; it was big because at that time I was maybe 16 years old when I got my first bike, and I couldn't even ride then because I was new to it.

The sentence contains article misuse ('a not a small' is ungrammatical) and awkward phrasing. Replace 'a not a small' with 'not small' and use 'it was big' for clarity. Use 'because' instead of 'cause' in formal speech. Tense consistency: 'I can't even ride at that time' should be past ability 'I couldn't even ride then' to match past context. Also remove filler repetitions and fix punctuation to separate clauses. Suggest practicing using correct articles ('a/an/the') and matching verb tense to the time reference.

× Yes, bikes are popular in our country because bikes are cheaper in our country than other countries so and people use it for transportation for daily basis.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country because they are cheaper here than in other countries, and people use them for daily transportation.

Multiple issues: redundant phrase 'in our country' repeated; comparison 'cheaper in our country than other countries' needs 'than in other countries'; pronoun agreement 'people use it' should be 'use them' to agree with plural 'bikes'; 'for daily basis' is incorrect, use 'for daily transportation' or 'on a daily basis'. Keep present tense 'are popular' and 'are cheaper' since this describes general facts. Suggest practicing pronoun agreement and common comparative structures 'cheaper here than in...'.