Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct past tense and concise sentences. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix vocabulary mistakes (e.g., "learn writing" -> "learn to ride") and remove repetition. Keep answers under five sentences.

예시: Yes. I had my first bike when I was nine. My parents bought it for my birthday because I wanted to learn to ride, so I practised every afternoon around our neighborhood. As a result, I soon became confident riding on quiet streets.

제안: Make the answer more concise and accurate: start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons linked with connectors. Correct minor grammar and phrasing (e.g., "when you are meeting a traffic jam" -> "when there's a traffic jam"; "not going a that far distance" -> "not travelling far"). Avoid vague phrases like "of great use to my life."

예시: Yes, bikes are popular in my country for two main reasons. First, they are convenient in cities because you can avoid traffic jams when you only need to travel short distances. Second, electric bike-sharing services—which you can rent via an app—have made cycling even more accessible for many people.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The speaker mixes present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use simple past 'had' to match the past context. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events (I had, I was).

× I first had my bike when I was nine years old and my mom and dad bought it for me because started as my birthday present and also because I really want to learn writing.

✓ I first got my bike when I was nine years old; my mom and dad bought it for me because it was my birthday present and because I really wanted to learn riding.

Multiple problems: 'had' is acceptable but 'got' or 'received' is more natural; 'because started as' is ungrammatical and likely intended 'it was my birthday present' (there is a missing subject and verb). Also 'want' is present tense while the context is past, so use 'wanted'. 'learn writing' is incorrect collocation for bicycle context; use 'learn riding' or 'learn to ride'. Suggestion: keep verbs in past tense for past events and use correct collocations ('learn to ride').

× So I started with my first bike around our neighborhood and that is how I mastered riding and got my first bike.

✓ So I rode my first bike around our neighborhood, and that is how I learned to ride and gained confidence.

The original repeats 'got my first bike' redundantly and uses awkward phrasing 'started with my first bike around our neighborhood'. Also 'mastered riding' is wordy; 'learned to ride' or 'became confident' is clearer. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use clear verb phrases ('rode', 'learned to ride').

× Yes, I believe they are definitely popular in my country because it is a very convenient way of travelling, especially when you are meeting a traffic jam and you're not going a that far distance.

✓ Yes, I believe they are definitely popular in my country because they are a very convenient way of travelling, especially when you encounter a traffic jam and you're not going a very long distance.

Pronoun agreement: 'it' should be 'they' to refer to 'bikes'. 'Meeting a traffic jam' is unnatural; use 'encounter a traffic jam'. 'going a that far distance' is ungrammatical — use 'going a very long distance' or 'traveling a short distance'. Also keep tense consistent; present is fine here. Suggestion: ensure pronoun agreement and use natural collocations ('encounter a traffic jam', 'a very long distance' or 'a short distance').

× Now we have electronic bikes which you can just rent using an app in your phone and it is very popular and it is of great use to my life and of to other people's life.

✓ Now we have electric bikes which you can rent using an app on your phone; they are very popular and very useful in my life and in other people's lives.

Use 'electric bikes' rather than 'electronic' for bikes. 'an app in your phone' should be 'an app on your phone'. Pronoun 'it' should be plural 'they' to match 'bikes'. 'It is of great use to my life and of to other people's life' is ungrammatical; use 'very useful in my life and in other people's lives'. Suggestion: match number between noun and pronoun, use correct preposition 'on' for phone apps, and pluralize 'lives'.