Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid irrelevant or confusing words (for example “sad”, “newer”, or “Vegas”). Correct grammar (past tense) and reduce hesitations. For instance, say you didn’t have a bike and explain why (distance to school, family reasons, or finances).

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Because my school was very close to my home, I usually walked there, so I never needed a bicycle. Also, my family couldn't afford one at the time, which is another reason I didn’t have one.

제안: Answer directly and give clear, specific supporting details with linking words. Use correct collocations (e.g., “popular in my country”, “commute to school”), and complete your comparisons or contrasts. Reduce fillers and finish your thoughts. You can mention which age groups use bikes, reasons for popularity, and any exceptions.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many primary and secondary school students commute to school by bicycle because it is cheap and convenient. However, older people tend to use public transport or cars, especially in big cities.

× No, when I was sad, I don't have any kind of vehicles, not even a bike.

✓ No, when I was a child, I didn't have any kind of vehicle, not even a bike.

The response refers to a past time ('when I was ...'), so present tense 'don't have' is incorrect; use past tense 'didn't have'. Also 'vehicles' should be singular in this context as a non-count or general noun 'vehicle' fits better. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time frame and use 'vehicle' when speaking generally.

× Uh, my school was newer to my home, so I don't need any kind of, umm, Vegas for reaching schools.

✓ Uh, my school was nearer to my home, so I didn't need any kind of, umm, vehicle to get to school.

Problems: 'newer to my home' is incorrect; use 'nearer to my home' to indicate proximity. 'I don't need' should be past 'I didn't need' to match past context. 'Vegas' is likely a mispronunciation of 'vehicle'. 'for reaching schools' is unnatural; use 'to get to school'. Suggestion: use 'nearer' for comparative proximity, match verb tense, and use 'vehicle' and 'to get to school'.

× Uh, when I'm not well, umm.

✓ Uh, when I wasn't well, umm.

Context is past (talking about childhood), so present 'I'm not well' is inconsistent; use past 'I wasn't well'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent within the narrative.

× Uh, yes, they are popular among the country.

✓ Uh, yes, they are popular in the country.

Use 'in the country' to mean throughout the country. 'Among the country' is incorrect because 'among' requires a group. Suggestion: use 'in the country' or 'across the country'.

× Uh, many schools, students uh, use uh, bikes for, uh, reaching to their schools.

✓ Many school students use bikes to get to their schools.

Original has disfluent word order and incorrect 'reaching to'. Correct structure: 'Many school students' or 'Many students' and verb phrase 'use bikes to get to their schools'. Suggestion: simplify phrase order and use 'to get to' for movement.

× Umm, mostly the primary level students are using bikes and uh, and most of the umm, older.

✓ Umm, mostly the primary-level students use bikes, and some older students do too.

Use simple present 'use' for habitual/general facts rather than 'are using' unless emphasizing ongoing action. The fragment 'and most of the older' is incomplete; clarify as 'some older students do too'. Suggestion: use simple present for general statements and complete the comparison.