Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and accurate in vocabulary and sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct the word choice (bike, not back), and avoid filler words like 'I guess' unless unsure. Give one or two concise supporting details (where you rode it, who gave it to you) and use a linking word if adding information. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I received it as a birthday present when I was eight, and I used to ride it every afternoon around my neighborhood. Because the roads were quiet, I felt confident learning new tricks with my friends.

제안: Organize your response: give a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and relevant vocabulary. Use correct words (outmoded, not 'out mooded') and coherent linking words (for example, because, therefore). Avoid irrelevant or unclear statements like 'we don't use bags that much.' Provide one or two concrete examples (e.g., preference for cars or public transport) to justify your view. Keep it natural and concise.

예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars or public transport for convenience. For example, long commutes and limited bike lanes make cycling impractical in many cities, so only a small number of enthusiasts cycle regularly.

× Yeah, I had a back when I was a child and I was 8 years old, I guess.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child; I was about 8 years old, I guess.

The student wrote 'back' instead of 'bike' which is a word error rather than article, but also 'a back' suggests an article misuse if intended 'a bike'. Corrected to 'a bike'. Replaced the second clause punctuation for clarity and changed 'and I was 8 years old' to 'I was about 8 years old' for naturalness. Suggestion: choose the correct noun and use simpler clause linking (semicolon or period).

× In my opinion the bikes are not that popular in my country.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are not that popular in my country.

Using 'the bikes' here is unnecessary definite article; general statements about a class use no article ('bikes'). Also added a comma after the introductory phrase for correct punctuation in spoken-to-written conversion. Suggestion: omit 'the' when speaking generally about things in a country.

× They're out mooded actually.

✓ They're outmoded, actually.

The phrase 'out mooded' is incorrect spelling and spacing for 'outmoded' (one word meaning old-fashioned). Also 'They're' correctly contracts 'They are'; just correct the adjective. Suggestion: learn common compound adjectives and check spelling.

× That's why uh, in today we don't use bags that much.

✓ That's why, nowadays, we don't use bikes that much.

'In today' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'nowadays' or 'today'. Also the original likely meant 'bikes' but wrote 'bags'—this is a noun error. Corrected to 'we don't use bikes that much' to match context. Suggestion: use 'nowadays' for general present-time statements and ensure noun matches context.