Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers ("umm"), correct collocations ("commute to school" or "ride it to school"), and add one specific supporting detail. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I used to ride my red bike almost every day to get to school and to visit the nearby park. I especially remember riding with my friends on weekends, which was how we spent most of our free time.

제안: Answer directly with a clear opinion sentence, avoid vague phrases ("from my perspectives"), remove hesitations, and use precise vocabulary: "accessible" not "assess". Provide one specific reason or an example and use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Hong Kong. They are affordable and very convenient for short trips, so many people use them to commute within neighborhoods or to reach parks and markets.

× I did have a bike when I was a child and I used to, umm, ride it to go to the park and commute to the school.

✓ I did have a bike when I was a child and I used to ride it to go to the park and commute to school.

The phrase 'commute to the school' uses an unnecessary definite article; 'school' as a routine destination typically omits 'the'. Also remove the extra comma and filler 'umm' for clarity. Keep the verb forms 'did have' and 'used to ride' because they correctly express past possession and habitual actions. Suggestion: say 'I used to ride it to the park and to school.'

× From my perspectives, our bikes are really popular in my country because, umm, it is easy to assess and it's cheaper.

✓ From my perspective, bicycles are really popular in my country because they are easy to access and inexpensive.

Multiple issues governed by allowed types: 'perspectives' should be singular 'perspective' (incorrect plural use fits 'Singular and plural issue' but primary is preposition/pronoun context); 'our bikes' is awkward — use 'bicycles' or 'bikes' without 'our' to state a general fact. 'it is easy to assess' is incorrect: 'assess' is wrong verb; the intended verb is 'access'. 'It's cheaper' compares without reference — use 'inexpensive' or 'cheaper than cars' for comparison. Also avoid filler 'umm'. Suggestion: use 'From my perspective, bicycles are really popular because they are easy to access and inexpensive.'

× Uh, I'm from Hong Kong, uh, it's a really small city, so we use bike to travel a lot.

✓ I'm from Hong Kong; it's a really small city, so we use bikes to travel a lot.

'Use bike' is incorrect because 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally about people using them. Also remove fillers and combine clauses for clarity. Suggestion: say 'we use bikes to get around a lot.'