Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fix grammar and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use correct tense and reduce filler words. For example, avoid repeating phrases like “when I was”.

예시: Yes, I had a bike as a child. I loved riding it around my neighborhood every weekend because it gave me freedom and helped me explore nearby parks.

제안: Organize your answer: give a clear opinion, then two specific reasons with linking words. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (people ride bikes; there aren’t proper bike lanes). Be concise and use relevant vocabulary like “cycle lanes,” “commute,” and “health benefits.”

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. However, there aren’t many proper cycle lanes, so people often ride on the road; nevertheless, many choose cycling because it is good exercise and helps reduce traffic congestion.

× Yeah, I did have a bike when I was when I was a child and I love to ride it when every time I go out.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I loved to ride it every time I went out.

Mixing past and present tense causes confusion. The question asks about childhood (past), so use past tense consistently: 'had' and 'loved'. Also 'every time I went out' should be past. Remove duplicated phrase 'when I was'. Use 'yes' instead of colloquial 'yeah' for formality.

× Yes, uh, a lot of people ride bike in my country, but uh, there is not a, there have, there isn't any appropriate, uh, bike Rd. in my country, but people still trying to uh, maintain their healthy body and, uh, reduce the traffic. So ride bikes.

✓ Yes, a lot of people ride bikes in my country, but there are not any appropriate bike roads in my country; however, people still try to keep healthy and reduce traffic by riding bikes.

Several issues corrected that match listed types: 'ride bike' needs plural 'bikes' (singular/plural issue). 'There is not' should be 'there are not' to agree with plural 'roads' (there be issue and subject-verb agreement). 'There have' is incorrect and removed. 'bike Rd.' is not proper; use 'bike roads' or 'bicycle lanes'. 'people still trying' lacks auxiliary verb; change to 'people still try' (present tense issue). 'maintain their healthy body' is awkward; use 'keep healthy'. 'reduce the traffic' should be 'reduce traffic' (article error). Finally add 'by riding bikes' to clarify purpose.