Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise in your topic sentence, correct grammar (tenses, possessives, verb choice), and avoid redundancy. Add one or two clear supporting details with linking words. For example, use 'ride' instead of 'write' and correct plural/singular forms and pronouns ('my parents trusted me'). Also focus on specific details (age, how it helped) and keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was the first vehicle I owned, and my parents trusted me to ride it to school from the age of nine. Because of that bike I could get to school quickly and I didn’t need to use public transport every day.

제안: Answer directly, reduce hesitation words, and use clearer linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Improve vocabulary and specificity: say who uses bikes, give an example of savings or other reasons (convenience, traffic). Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid vague phrases like 'and stuff'.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and easy to maintain. For example, many students and low-income workers use bicycles to save on fuel and avoid traffic during rush hour.

× Yes, I did own a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I owned a bike when I was a child.

The auxiliary 'did' is unnecessary with the past simple verb 'own'. In English, use either 'Did you own...?' for questions or 'I owned...' for statements. Remove 'did' to form a correct past simple statement.

× In fact it was the first ever vehicle that I ever owned and it's something that my parent trust me to write on my own considering they allowed me to write my own bike to school and it has helped with the public transportation so much.

✓ In fact, it was the first vehicle I ever owned, and my parents trusted me to ride it to school; it also helped me a lot with public transportation.

The original sentence has multiple structural errors: redundant words ('first ever' and 'ever'), wrong verb choices ('write' instead of 'ride'), singular/plural agreement ('parent' vs 'parents'), incorrect verb tense ('trust' should be past 'trusted'), and awkward phrasing ('write my own bike to school'). Correct by simplifying, using correct verbs ('ride'), matching plural subjects with verbs ('parents trusted'), and splitting into clearer clauses. Use commas and a semicolon to improve readability.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

✓ Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

This question is acceptable as written; no article correction is needed. Included here to show no change is required.

× Yes, I do agree that I do think that bikes are popular in my country considering that umm where I'm from, it's the most common vehicle that's used by people with low income.

✓ Yes, I agree that bikes are popular in my country because, where I'm from, they are the most common vehicles used by people with low incomes.

The original has redundant phrases ('I do agree that I do think'), informal filler ('umm'), singular pronouns ('it's') that do not match the plural noun 'bikes', and awkward quantifier use ('low income' should be 'low incomes' or 'people with low incomes'). Remove redundancy, eliminate fillers, ensure subject-pronoun agreement ('they are' for bikes), and use the correct plural form for 'income' when referring to people.

× This is due to the fact that it saves money that you don't have to spend on gas and stuff.

✓ This is because it saves money since you do not have to spend on gas and other expenses.

The phrase 'due to the fact that' is wordy; 'because' is more natural. 'Saves money that you don't have to spend on gas and stuff' is informal and awkward. Use 'you do not have to spend on gas and other expenses' for clearer, more formal expression. Also change contraction 'don't' to 'do not' for formality if needed.