Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition. Focus on exact facts (whose bike it was, how you used it) and a short memory to make the answer natural and coherent.

예시: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child, although it actually belonged to my father. For example, I often borrowed his bike to ride around our neighborhood and pretend I was racing, especially on weekends. Because it wasn’t mine, I was careful with it and usually rode close to home.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and avoid repeating the same point. Mention a concrete context (commuting, cost, traffic) to make your answer more informative and natural.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap to run and help people avoid heavy traffic. For example, many office workers use motorbikes to commute during rush hour, which saves them around 20–30 minutes compared with cars. Additionally, bikes are easier to park, so they’re a convenient choice for short trips.

× Vela yes, I did have a bike which is technically that was not my bike, that was my father's, which I used to, you know, say, which I used to, uh, I mean sit on it and always act.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike, but technically it was not mine; it was my father's, and I used to sit on it and pretend to ride.

The sentence contains unclear and incorrect pronoun and clause usage. 'Which is technically that was not my bike' mixes relative clause forms and is ungrammatical. Replace awkward pronouns and clauses with clear subjects ('it') and linkers ('but', 'and'). Remove filler phrases ('you know', 'uh', 'I mean') for clarity. Also simplify repeated 'which I used to' into a single clause. Suggestion: use a clear subject and concise relative clause structure: 'it was my father's' and 'I used to sit on it and pretend to ride.'

× Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because saves your time and it is also quite efficient, while when you have to travel in traffic it helps you to save your time as I told you and.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they save time and are very efficient; when you have to travel in traffic, they help you save time.

The original sentence has sentence structure and subject-verb agreement issues. 'because saves your time' lacks a subject; introduce 'they' to agree with 'bikes' (plural). 'it is also quite efficient' uses singular 'it' for plural 'bikes'—change to 'are'. Remove redundant phrases ('as I told you and') and avoid ending with 'and'. Combine clauses clearly and use commas or a semicolon to separate ideas. Suggestion: ensure subjects match verb number and avoid redundant or trailing conjunctions.