Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, use correct past tense and clear sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and repetition. For example, correct verb forms: “I had,” “my father gave me,” and “he taught me.” Also replace unclear phrases like “how to write it” with the intended idea (probably “how to ride it”).

예시: I had a pink bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me and taught me how to ride it, so I learned quickly. Because he practiced with me in the park every weekend, I became confident riding on roads by the time I was nine.

제안: Answer directly and clearly, using correct grammar and logical linking. Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Bicycles are popular among children but not so much among adults”). Then give specific reasons and use linking words such as “because” or “however.” Correct count/plural forms (children, employees) and avoid irrelevant details.

예시: Bicycles are quite popular among children in my country but not so common among adults. This is because most adults can afford cars, so they prefer driving. However, some people still cycle for exercise or short trips in cities where traffic and parking are difficult.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was child my father bring to me umm it's pink bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; my father brought it to me. It was a pink bike.

Past event requires past simple verbs. 'Have' should be 'had' and 'bring' should be in past tense 'brought'. Also add article 'a' before 'child' and use object pronoun 'it'. Use punctuation to separate ideas. Suggestion: Use past simple consistently for completed past events: 'I had... my father brought...'. Use articles: 'a child', 'a pink bike'.

× So I learned umm yeah, so I learned how to use it with my father.

✓ So I learned how to use it with my father.

Redundant filler words 'umm yeah, so' are unnecessary but not grammar errors; sentence is correct in past tense. Suggestion: Remove fillers for clarity and keep past tense 'learned'. Note: no verb tense change needed.

× He teach me how to use it, how to write it so and.

✓ He taught me how to use it.

Subject 'He' refers to a third person in the past; the verb must be past form 'taught'. 'Teach' is present tense. 'How to write it so and' is unclear and ungrammatical; remove or rephrase. Suggestion: Use 'He taught me how to use it' or, if you meant riding, 'He taught me how to ride it.'

× He has four children.

✓ He has four children.

This sentence is grammatically correct; number agreement is fine. No change needed. Suggestion: Keep as is. (Included for completeness.)

× Uh, it's a popular in my country and for the employers or employees, uh and umm, everyone have cars.

✓ Uh, bicycles are popular in my country, but among employers and employees, almost everyone has a car.

Incorrect article 'a' before 'popular' and wrong noun form. 'It's a popular' is incorrect; use 'bicycles are popular' or 'it is popular' with clear subject. 'Everyone have' violates subject-verb agreement; use 'has'. Suggestion: Use plural subject 'bicycles' and match verb: 'everyone has'.

× So that why it's not popular for the adult.

✓ So that is why they are not popular among adults.

'It's' (it is) is incorrect reference; plurality mismatch: 'adult' should be plural 'adults' and verb/subject must agree. 'Bicycles' plural require 'they are not popular' or 'it is not popular for adults' if referring to 'the bicycle' generically. Suggestion: Use 'they are not popular among adults.'

× It's too famous between the children's.

✓ They are very popular with children.

'Too famous' is unnatural; use 'very popular'. 'Between' is incorrect preposition for groups; use 'with' or 'among'. 'Children's' is possessive; use plural 'children'. Suggestion: Say 'very popular with children'.