Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on grammar (tense and agreement), correct word choice, and clearer phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. For example, use past simple consistently (was, bought, felt) and correct nouns (bike, ride, souvenir). Avoid unclear phrases like “first buy” or “first bite.”

예시: Yes, I did. My first bike was a gift from my father—he bought it in Russia while he was on a long work trip. I remember feeling very excited when I first saw it because it was bright red and had a small bell, which made it feel special.

제안: Give a clear, direct opinion then support it with specific reasons and a linking phrase. Use correct tense and smoother wording (e.g., “used to be popular” for past habit). Add an example or comparison to be more precise. Avoid filler words like “uh.”

예시: Yes, bikes used to be very popular in my country, especially many years ago when people rode them for short trips. However, nowadays most people prefer motorbikes or cars because they are faster and more convenient for longer distances.

× Yes, my first buy was a gift from my father.

✓ Yes, my first bike was a gift from my father.

The word 'buy' is a noun here meaning an item purchased; the correct noun is 'bike'. Using 'buy' is incorrect word choice rather than a verb tense error; replace it with 'bike' to make the sentence meaningful and grammatically correct.

× He bought it in Russia during a long work trip and I vividly remember how excited I were when I first saw.

✓ He bought it in Russia during a long work trip and I vividly remember how excited I was when I first saw it.

The clause refers to a past event, so past tense 'was' is required for first-person singular (subject-verb agreement). Also the verb 'saw' needs an object 'it' to be complete. Correct subject-verb agreement and include the object.

× It's because it's got my very first bite and it's look really special.

✓ It's because it was my very first bike and it looked really special.

Several problems: 'bite' is a typo for 'bike'; 'it's got' is awkward and mismatched for past possession—use 'it was' to describe a past characteristic; 'it's look' mixes present with past context and incorrect verb form—use 'it looked'. Ensure consistent past tense and correct word choice.

× Yes, but it's very popular in my country in some in a long year ago.

✓ Yes, but bicycles were much more popular in my country some years ago.

The original mixes present 'it's' with past time expressions ('a long year ago'), causing a tense mismatch. Use past tense 'were' and correct time expression 'some years ago'. Also replace vague 'it's' with the plural subject 'bicycles' for clarity.

× Uh, nowadays people usually use motorbike or car.

✓ Nowadays people usually use motorbikes or cars.

When speaking about general habits in the present, use plural nouns to match 'people' and show generalization: 'motorbikes or cars'. This fixes number agreement and makes the sentence natural.