Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, avoid filler words (e.g., "umm"), correct grammar (past tense and word order), and expand with one specific supporting detail. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences and use linking words if you add reasons or contrasts.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I had a scooter from the age of eight, which I used to ride around my neighborhood every afternoon. However, I always wanted a bike because it would have been faster for longer trips.

제안: Answer directly with a clear present-tense opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "also"). Fix grammar ("it is not that popular") and avoid awkward phrases ("push factor"). Use relevant vocabulary but keep sentences natural and concise.

예시: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in Hong Kong. This is because public transport is convenient and covers most routes, and the city's humid weather makes cycling uncomfortable for many people. Also, limited bike lanes and hilly terrain discourage daily cycling for commuting.

× Unfortunately I didn't have a bike as when I was a child.

✓ Unfortunately I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The phrase 'as when' is redundant and ungrammatical in this context. Use 'when' alone to indicate time. Suggestion: remove 'as' so the sentence reads clearly as a past-time statement.

× Umm, but I then got a scooter.

✓ Umm, but I got a scooter later.

'Then' placement is awkward here; 'got' is past tense which is correct, but 'later' sounds more natural to indicate a subsequent event. Suggestion: place the time adverb after the verb or use 'later' for clarity.

× No, I don't think it was.

✓ No, I don't think they are.

The examiner asked about current popularity. The student uses present tense in 'don't think' but refers to 'it was' (past), causing tense inconsistency. Also 'bikes' is plural, so use 'they are'. Suggestion: keep present tense and match number.

× It is that popular in our country.

✓ They're not that popular in our country.

'It' incorrectly refers to 'bikes' (plural). Also sentence lacks negation matching previous reply. Use 'they' for plural and include negation 'not' to express lack of popularity. Suggestion: use correct plural pronoun and structure.

× The reason is being that Hong Kong is a very convenient place and people can take public transport basically everywhere.

✓ The reason is that Hong Kong is a very convenient place and people can take public transport almost everywhere.

'The reason is being that' is ungrammatical; use 'The reason is that'. 'Basically everywhere' is colloquial and slightly awkward; 'almost everywhere' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'The reason is that' and a clearer adverb.

× The weather is too humid, so it's not a very good push factor for people to use bicycles to travel.

✓ The weather is quite humid, so it's not a strong incentive for people to use bicycles for travel.

'Too humid' implies excessive to a degree that may be inaccurate; 'quite humid' is safer. 'Push factor' is awkward in everyday speech; 'incentive' fits better. Also 'to use bicycles to travel' is redundant—'use bicycles for travel' is clearer. Suggestion: use more natural collocations and concise phrasing.