Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use correct tense and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid pronoun errors (use 'it' or 'my bike'), and correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., 'when I was young', 'I practised').

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle when I was about seven, and I practised riding it every day after school. Because I loved cycling, I became more confident and started exploring my neighbourhood on weekends.

제안: Answer directly, use correct grammar and clearer linking words to explain reasons. Give one or two specific reasons or examples and avoid repetition. Use quantifiers correctly (e.g., 'a lot of people' or 'many people') and link causes and results (e.g., 'so' or 'therefore').

예시: Yes, I do. Many people in my country use bikes because cities are crowded and traffic is heavy, so cycling is faster and cheaper than driving. For example, students often bike to school and market vendors use bicycles to move goods short distances.

× Specifically, yes I do, I wrote.

✓ Specifically, yes I did.

The question asks about the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the student should use the past tense. 'I wrote' is incorrect and unrelated; use 'I did' as a short answer in past tense. Suggestion: use past tense auxiliary (did) for short answers to past questions.

× I rode bike when I'm young, I practice him and I'm really in influencing by it.

✓ I rode a bike when I was young. I practised riding it and I was really influenced by it.

Multiple errors: 'rode bike' needs the article 'a' (article error, but covered by sentence structure/usage) and past simple 'rode' correctly used, but 'I'm young' should be past 'I was young' (tense error). 'I practice him' is incorrect: the intended meaning is practising riding the bike — use 'practised riding it' (verb + -ing and correct object). 'I'm really in influencing by it' is wrong: passive past 'was really influenced by it' is appropriate. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense, use correct verbs and pronoun references ('it' for the bike), and use passive past 'was influenced' when describing being affected.

× Uh yes I do. There is a lot of people in my country is very crowded so people have have to ride bikes to school and stuff.

✓ Yes, I do. There are a lot of people in my country, so it is very crowded and people often have to ride bikes to school and for other things.

Several problems: 'There is a lot of people' is subject-verb agreement with 'people' (plural) so use 'There are a lot of people' (There be issue and subject-verb agreement). 'in my country is very crowded' lacks a subject and proper structure — use 'so it is very crowded' (sentence structure). 'have have to' is a duplication and should be 'have to' (sentence structure). Also 'and stuff' is informal; 'for other things' or 'for other purposes' is clearer. Suggestions: use 'There are' with plural nouns, add appropriate subject for clauses ('it is very crowded'), remove duplicated words, and choose clearer vocabulary.