Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is natural, relevant and gives personal details, which is good. To improve further, make the opening more direct and vary sentence structures slightly to show a wider range of language. Use one linking phrase to connect the past habit with an illustrative detail, and avoid small redundancies (e.g. "I absolutely did" could be shortened). Keep within five sentences — you already do — but try adding a specific example or brief reason to deepen the answer.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small bike with stabilizers and I often rode it around my neighborhood at weekends with my friends; for example, we would race to the park and back. Although I fell over a few times while learning to balance, those experiences made cycling a memorable part of my childhood.

제안: Your response covers key points and is clear, but it is somewhat fragmented (short sentence "In cities.") and could use smoother linking words to improve coherence. Expand slightly with a specific statistic, location or example to support your view, and replace choppy fragments with complete sentences. Use linking phrases (e.g. "for instance", "however") to show logical relations between ideas.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular, especially in urban areas where shared bike schemes are common. For instance, many city dwellers use bikes for short journeys to work or the shops, while others cycle at weekends for exercise. However, for longer trips people tend to choose cars because they are faster and more comfortable.

× I would ride it around my local area most weekends with friends.

✓ I rode it around my local area most weekends with my friends.

The original uses 'would' which can be acceptable to describe habitual past actions but may be ambiguous here; replacing with simple past 'rode' makes the past habitual meaning clearer and matches the surrounding past-tense narrative. Also add 'my' before 'friends' for natural possession and clarity.

× In cities.

✓ In cities,

'In cities.' is a sentence fragment without a verb or connection to the previous sentence. Changing the full stop to a comma connects it to the next sentence ('People use them...') and creates a complete, fluent sentence: 'Bikes are really widespread, especially with shared bikes everywhere in cities.' Alternatively, attach the fragment to the prior sentence to avoid a sentence fragment.

× People use them for short journeys, while others cycle for leisure and exercise.

✓ People use them for short journeys, and others cycle for leisure and exercise.

The original 'while' implies simultaneity or contrast; 'and' is clearer to list different common uses. This is a style/structure improvement to make the sentence parallel and clearer within the context. 'While' is not grammatically wrong but can suggest contrast; using 'and' better reflects the intended addition of information.